Name: Lauren Rivers
Age: 29
Gender: Female
Species: Zebra
Title: Master of Water
Physical Description: Standard zebra markings, 5’6”, no facial stripes and a distinct diamond shaped mark on her forehead. She possesses blue streaks in the front layers of her hair. Her standard outfit is brown with gold highlights, representative of her status as a master of water. She has green eyes.
Reference Sheet: http://www.furaffinity.net/view/8263180/
Biographical Data:
Raised by her adoptive mother, Madeleine Rivers, Lauren never knew the genuine identities of her parents. As a young child, Lauren displayed a notable curiosity towards the craft, which was the ability of her people to use crystals to create effects upon the world around them in twelve distinct styles. It was noted that she shared a particular affinity towards water, and at sixteen she was recorded as having a minor level of natural control over water when a spilled drink followed her hand along the surface of a table up an incline. Sponsored by Lucas, a male ferret, he insisted she join the Academy. For obvious reasons, he recommended her to study water.
At eighteen, Lauren was selected to be one of several candidates to train directly at the Tower. She was hand chosen by Lucas to be his successor, trained in combat as well as peacetime uses of her powers. Tests displayed her control of her channeled powers to be highly developed, registering impressive results consistent throughout her training. When fully focused, she was able to manipulate enough water at once to affect nearby weather patterns, though to do so drained whatever crystal she was using and it was often hard to control at this level without a master’s level of skill.
At twenty-four, Lauren was formally named the next person to control the water discipline. With the probability of war becoming more and more likely, her training in combat was increased, much to her dismay. Preferring to avoid violence, she did as instructed. Her mentor showed her the Vault, a room in which they kept all of their most dangerous treasures, in case something should happen to the Tower. Later that evening, Lauren discovered a man attempting to remove an artifact from the Vault, and returned it to its proper place. The thief had been killed by Isabelle Sheridan, the next in line to master Ice, who determined it was safer than risking his escape with the item he stole.
On the final day of the war, she was present in the Tower along with Isabelle Sheridan and Bennett Walsh, then the leader of the Gravity discipline. The building was attacked, and she escaped with her life. After meeting a courier in the forest outside of the city, she disappeared and went into hiding along with the others.
Five years later, she emerges from concealment upon learning that a Keystone, an object of immense power, has resurfaced in their home city of Vanskar.
Age: 29
Gender: Female
Species: Zebra
Title: Master of Water
Physical Description: Standard zebra markings, 5’6”, no facial stripes and a distinct diamond shaped mark on her forehead. She possesses blue streaks in the front layers of her hair. Her standard outfit is brown with gold highlights, representative of her status as a master of water. She has green eyes.
Reference Sheet: http://www.furaffinity.net/view/8263180/
Biographical Data:
Raised by her adoptive mother, Madeleine Rivers, Lauren never knew the genuine identities of her parents. As a young child, Lauren displayed a notable curiosity towards the craft, which was the ability of her people to use crystals to create effects upon the world around them in twelve distinct styles. It was noted that she shared a particular affinity towards water, and at sixteen she was recorded as having a minor level of natural control over water when a spilled drink followed her hand along the surface of a table up an incline. Sponsored by Lucas, a male ferret, he insisted she join the Academy. For obvious reasons, he recommended her to study water.
At eighteen, Lauren was selected to be one of several candidates to train directly at the Tower. She was hand chosen by Lucas to be his successor, trained in combat as well as peacetime uses of her powers. Tests displayed her control of her channeled powers to be highly developed, registering impressive results consistent throughout her training. When fully focused, she was able to manipulate enough water at once to affect nearby weather patterns, though to do so drained whatever crystal she was using and it was often hard to control at this level without a master’s level of skill.
At twenty-four, Lauren was formally named the next person to control the water discipline. With the probability of war becoming more and more likely, her training in combat was increased, much to her dismay. Preferring to avoid violence, she did as instructed. Her mentor showed her the Vault, a room in which they kept all of their most dangerous treasures, in case something should happen to the Tower. Later that evening, Lauren discovered a man attempting to remove an artifact from the Vault, and returned it to its proper place. The thief had been killed by Isabelle Sheridan, the next in line to master Ice, who determined it was safer than risking his escape with the item he stole.
On the final day of the war, she was present in the Tower along with Isabelle Sheridan and Bennett Walsh, then the leader of the Gravity discipline. The building was attacked, and she escaped with her life. After meeting a courier in the forest outside of the city, she disappeared and went into hiding along with the others.
Five years later, she emerges from concealment upon learning that a Keystone, an object of immense power, has resurfaced in their home city of Vanskar.
Category Story / General Furry Art
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Perhaps, I am always trying to think of a smooth way to describe her hair.
As for number 2, that's kind of hard to do since half the time artists give her blue eyes and half green. It has never been something I have made a definitive ruling on until now, I do not know which looks better.
As for number 2, that's kind of hard to do since half the time artists give her blue eyes and half green. It has never been something I have made a definitive ruling on until now, I do not know which looks better.
I like this--it gives more insight into Lauren's background, and what motivates her. I never knew she was averse to violence--seeing the way that she defends herself, it is clear that she knows how to fight.
One thing, though--the sentence "Preferring to avoid violence, she did as instructed." This infers that she did as she was instructed because she wanted to avoid violence. However, from the context of the story, I am led to believe that she continued with her combat training despite her desire to avoid violence.
One thing, though--the sentence "Preferring to avoid violence, she did as instructed." This infers that she did as she was instructed because she wanted to avoid violence. However, from the context of the story, I am led to believe that she continued with her combat training despite her desire to avoid violence.
Well, I've always thought of Lauren as the kind of person that would never start a bar fight, but she will finish it. She just prefers not to have the stick being her first option.
I suppose that is awkward, I may have to edit it later. I was going for a she does it but she doesn't have to like it feel.
I suppose that is awkward, I may have to edit it later. I was going for a she does it but she doesn't have to like it feel.
Very nice biography. One thing that I'm curious about, though... As you were making this, did you have any plans for her character development? She seems to have almost no weaknesses in this biography save for not liking violence. In my opinion, flaws, fears, and imperfections help to flesh out a character and make them more interesting, and the part where someone overcomes a weakness is almost as great as the climax of the plot.
Another thing to note is that I hardly see any personality in this biography. Basically, what I see is a robot that's really good with manipulating water and becomes a master. What's her goal in life? What are her major desires? I'm not saying that she doesn't have any, I'm just saying I can't really tell just from reading this.
Anyway, it's still a good biography. I'm just noting things that I feel were missing. You may have a good idea of your character, but readers don't have as clear an idea.
Another thing to note is that I hardly see any personality in this biography. Basically, what I see is a robot that's really good with manipulating water and becomes a master. What's her goal in life? What are her major desires? I'm not saying that she doesn't have any, I'm just saying I can't really tell just from reading this.
Anyway, it's still a good biography. I'm just noting things that I feel were missing. You may have a good idea of your character, but readers don't have as clear an idea.
If you know me at all, you'll know that I don't write perfect or god moded characters at all. I should say that I appreciate the comment, but you don't have to tell me that. If you've read my work or seen my characters enough I think at the very least it conveys that they are for lack of a better term 'human'.
Honestly, I did not include personality data or character growth here because it was intended as a biographical report and or timeline aide. I prefer this information to come out in the story rather than be descriped here as I often find when people describe their characters personality it feels fake or awkward. Obviously this is not intended to be read like fiction, but more like a textbook in this context. I aimed to be a little more than 'just the facts, ma'am' but it might be something I may incorporate later.
My initial purpose was to get to know my characters better, and while personality traits may be helpful, I was more thinking in terms of her chronology here.
Thanks for your comments, though. I wonder if it would be better integrated into the main body of the data or would be best suited for its own section?
Honestly, I did not include personality data or character growth here because it was intended as a biographical report and or timeline aide. I prefer this information to come out in the story rather than be descriped here as I often find when people describe their characters personality it feels fake or awkward. Obviously this is not intended to be read like fiction, but more like a textbook in this context. I aimed to be a little more than 'just the facts, ma'am' but it might be something I may incorporate later.
My initial purpose was to get to know my characters better, and while personality traits may be helpful, I was more thinking in terms of her chronology here.
Thanks for your comments, though. I wonder if it would be better integrated into the main body of the data or would be best suited for its own section?
Oh, I hope I didn't offend you or anything. I've read some of your stories and I know that you are a great writer. I'm sure that this sort of thing isn't any real problem for you. I was just wondering why you had left out the personality, but I suppose that's because you probably already have a clear idea of what Lauren is like. As for me, I keep forgetting those sorts of traits from my own characters, so I suppose I might need to include them in my biographies.
You didn't, and I apologize if I seem a bit sensitive or anything, I'm doing my best to try to learn more about what works for me and how to improve, and I very much appreciate the compliment. It's actually something I probably should've done a while ago, but I just never did because at the time I didn't think I needed to, though if nothing else it'll help me remember.
I don't know, I guess I could put personality details in, though it also occurs to me those sorts of things may change as the story progresses, such as life goals, but I certainly don't want to overlook anything.
I don't know, I guess I could put personality details in, though it also occurs to me those sorts of things may change as the story progresses, such as life goals, but I certainly don't want to overlook anything.
Well, in general I think that I am moderately familiar with my characters personalities, I've been told on more than one occassion when borrowing someone's character that I hit their personality spot on (high praise from their creators), though I do not wish to ignore anything critical.
In terms of personality, I think sometimes its hard to put into words even though I think I understand it. Like if you asked me to describe my personality, I'm not sure if I could, least not off the top of my head. Maybe if I thought about it. :)
In terms of personality, I think sometimes its hard to put into words even though I think I understand it. Like if you asked me to describe my personality, I'm not sure if I could, least not off the top of my head. Maybe if I thought about it. :)
I wonder what Lauren's sun sign is. Yesterday I uploaded a north Indian Vedic astrology chart right here. Where do you think it is? You can tell me if it is alright with you.
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