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![[C-WIP] Bed Time Snuggles](http://d.furaffinity.net/art/kierstal/1333002489/1333002489.kierstal_bedtimesnuggles_wip9hrs.jpg "Click to change the View")
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9 hours down, 15 hours to go...
's redlining helped a great deal with the necks and arms and the detail in the top character's back :D
Darkened the entire thing, now adding colors in on top and starting to plot the highlights. Also put some shadows beneath the bowl which looked like it was floating in space before; hopefully this fixes that effect somewhat.
Thanks everyone for your help and critiques :) Still open to lighting/proportions help if anyone finds anything I'm doing horribly wrong :P
Whitefang, Darkpaw, Rontosh and Kayila are all the intellectual property of their respective owners :3
's redlining helped a great deal with the necks and arms and the detail in the top character's back :DDarkened the entire thing, now adding colors in on top and starting to plot the highlights. Also put some shadows beneath the bowl which looked like it was floating in space before; hopefully this fixes that effect somewhat.
Thanks everyone for your help and critiques :) Still open to lighting/proportions help if anyone finds anything I'm doing horribly wrong :P
Whitefang, Darkpaw, Rontosh and Kayila are all the intellectual property of their respective owners :3
Category Artwork (Digital) / General Furry Art
Species Unspecified / Any
Size 1024 x 1280px
File Size 877.7 kB
If you're still looking for feedback on the WIP, the addition of the background helps me figure out what was looking off to me about that bowl - and shows that I was a touch oblivious to the picture title when I gave feedback last time around.
What I did in my mind was essentially place the bowl level on a table, and try to imagine the angle that I'd need to look at it to see that level of depth. That angle ends up being roughly 30-45 degrees above the horizon (with 0 being a look at the sides of the bowl.
In contrast, you are looking at the furs from what is essentially a head-on view. When I tried to reconcile the different angles in the previous draft, I imagined that they were standing, with some sort of visual barrier and the bowl was in front of/on said barrier. This creates a prospective of being slightly above the characters, looking down towards them, the bowl providing a spatial orientation reference point.
Now that the background has been added, I can see that it's supposed to be a bed (which was essentially stated in the title, but I somehow missed when making my critique last time). Assuming the background is now level with the ground and the bowl is still at the 30-45 degree angle relative to the viewer, this would mean that viewer is looking down at the scene and the bowl would need to be at something like a 45-60 degree angle relative to the horizon. This is not exactly a stable position and it would tend to shift to something close to sitting flat on the bed (or legs under the sheets). As such, I would have expected something more like a top down view of the bowl than the angle view currently being presented.
What I did in my mind was essentially place the bowl level on a table, and try to imagine the angle that I'd need to look at it to see that level of depth. That angle ends up being roughly 30-45 degrees above the horizon (with 0 being a look at the sides of the bowl.
In contrast, you are looking at the furs from what is essentially a head-on view. When I tried to reconcile the different angles in the previous draft, I imagined that they were standing, with some sort of visual barrier and the bowl was in front of/on said barrier. This creates a prospective of being slightly above the characters, looking down towards them, the bowl providing a spatial orientation reference point.
Now that the background has been added, I can see that it's supposed to be a bed (which was essentially stated in the title, but I somehow missed when making my critique last time). Assuming the background is now level with the ground and the bowl is still at the 30-45 degree angle relative to the viewer, this would mean that viewer is looking down at the scene and the bowl would need to be at something like a 45-60 degree angle relative to the horizon. This is not exactly a stable position and it would tend to shift to something close to sitting flat on the bed (or legs under the sheets). As such, I would have expected something more like a top down view of the bowl than the angle view currently being presented.
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