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Marital bliss, marital bliss. Hmmm. No,
just sounds like an oxymoron to me. You
love someone, you're gonna fight with
them sooner or later
But a married wolf and bunny. Now you have to
think they're going to find some different
things to fight over.
Almost guaranteed you never thought of this one. :- )
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Note: The Thursday Prompt that got this one written
was 'taking a stand.'
LINK TO: Spoken Word Version
<<<< To Wolf and Bunny Table of Contents
On Temptation (#11)
Can bunnies snarl? Oh yah, and loud. I know.
But I’ve no choice. This year it can’t be done.
It means taking a stand. I’ve tried to show
Her my side. No good. This fight won’t be won.
It’s just a veggie garden? More than that.
The herbivore in her sees just the crops.
And tasty, sure enough; we’ve gotten fat.
Except into that garden something hops.
She sleeps, I hear: all night the rabbits feast
On what to them is better than pure gold.
An easy meal, and free. Save that the beast
In me cries out a lupine call, so old.
To winnow out the herd, the kills no loss.
But do it and my tail is served in sauce.
just sounds like an oxymoron to me. You
love someone, you're gonna fight with
them sooner or later
But a married wolf and bunny. Now you have to
think they're going to find some different
things to fight over.
Almost guaranteed you never thought of this one. :- )
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>>>>> On Temptation (#11) <<<<<
By Fred Brown, Sept 17/2011
https://www.furaffinity.net/user/fwbrown61/
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Note: The Thursday Prompt that got this one written
was 'taking a stand.'
LINK TO: Spoken Word Version
<<<< To Wolf and Bunny Table of Contents
On Temptation (#11)
Can bunnies snarl? Oh yah, and loud. I know.
But I’ve no choice. This year it can’t be done.
It means taking a stand. I’ve tried to show
Her my side. No good. This fight won’t be won.
It’s just a veggie garden? More than that.
The herbivore in her sees just the crops.
And tasty, sure enough; we’ve gotten fat.
Except into that garden something hops.
She sleeps, I hear: all night the rabbits feast
On what to them is better than pure gold.
An easy meal, and free. Save that the beast
In me cries out a lupine call, so old.
To winnow out the herd, the kills no loss.
But do it and my tail is served in sauce.
Category Poetry / All
Species Wolf
Size 120 x 120px
File Size 4.5 kB
Almost certainly could have been told better in prose, not poetic form. Not enough room to
tell the story of what must've been a helluva fight between these two. We lack drama here.
Still, I'll pat myself on back for an original plot situation (assuming anybody can figure it
out. :- ) ). Think I'll keep it.
tell the story of what must've been a helluva fight between these two. We lack drama here.
Still, I'll pat myself on back for an original plot situation (assuming anybody can figure it
out. :- ) ). Think I'll keep it.
I think I get it. The bunny has a garden and other bunnies go there to eat from it. The wolf must do his best not to eat any of those other bunnies since they'd be so easy to catch. The reason he doesn't because he love his bunny wife and has respect for her but that doesn't make it any easier to resist the temptation.
As to doing it better in prose. I disagree. The poem makes you think and imagine for yourself what the dilemma is. In prose you might have "told" it too well and ruined the joy of discovering on one's own.
As to doing it better in prose. I disagree. The poem makes you think and imagine for yourself what the dilemma is. In prose you might have "told" it too well and ruined the joy of discovering on one's own.
In a word, yes. I'm developing quite a picture of these two, as characters. This one just
rolled off the keyboard; a natural.
Gotta notice that the explanation is longer than the poem. A hazard to 'story'
sonnets, I fear.
Still, sonnets have license to be dense 'n cryptic. Don't think I abused the privilege
too badly here.
More where this came from, I hope.
rolled off the keyboard; a natural.
Gotta notice that the explanation is longer than the poem. A hazard to 'story'
sonnets, I fear.
Still, sonnets have license to be dense 'n cryptic. Don't think I abused the privilege
too badly here.
More where this came from, I hope.
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