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Phew, here is the next chapter of my second Series - The tourist guide.
Well, well, what happened to drastic on planet Earth? Stay tuned if you want to find out more.
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Well, well, what happened to drastic on planet Earth? Stay tuned if you want to find out more.
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Please leave me some comments, suggestions and complainments, they are always welcome.
All characters belong to ME, MTT3.
Category Story / All
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File Size 19.5 kB
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The dots. Those -> "...". Grammarwise I thought I also noticed some slipping with choosing fröm this-that-etc and sometimes you went kinda roundabout way and said something simple with overly long sentence. Wasn't like that happened every sentence but I did notice it in at least one spot and had a little trouble thinking what was meant.
But hey least you gave me an reminder for making an simple pulp illustration with this and the earlier chapter. =P
But hey least you gave me an reminder for making an simple pulp illustration with this and the earlier chapter. =P
I really have to admit for the second chapter of this series you have done really well, going into the previous events in order to lead up to the following events. You also did really well describing the protocals and the charecters even more, the description you gave, along with the detail and suspense when they met the last human was fantastic. Even the part where he had two needs in his wrists and neck interested me along with the chemical sealing them really quickly. You have done really well with this although I am interested to hear more of the home planet and what had happened to the humans on the planet. As it said in this part of the chapter it had only taken a single second for nearly the whole of humanity to supposidly be wiped out. So well done matt with this and I look forward to reading your third chapter.
I have now read through the two first parts of one of your stories and so far i like it. The perspektive you have of the human race being extinct except one man. And exploring and learning about earth through Shricktas and Orrlanovss, it's just such a good story and i'm impressed. There is typos and such, but wth, with a story like that who cares. Besides, i make tons of them myself, theres properly loads of them in this comment. I will read the rest of them and i will enjoy it just as much as i enjoyed reading the first two parts ^^
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