Have you got an email address I can use to send you some comments? Also any text-editing software (Open Office, MS Office, etc?).
Thanks

I have to say I really did enjoy reading this, You did really well to build this up and describe the emotions and thoughts of both syrren and Matt. I found it interesting as well how you slowly described the conversation the two were having and explaining it clearly and well. It was also a surprise that Syrren could shape-shift into a similar human form. I really did enjoy this and very well done I must say, I will read future chapters indeed and I never expected this chapter to end the way it did

Wow...thats good! Well done sir. Really discriptive. Hm. Must read others.

Wow, you are quite the dedicated and fast reader, are you? ^.=.^

I likes books. I once read all the Harry potters in two days cause I got bored.

I am glad that I finally have read your story, even when it is round 2:30 in the morning and I actually had to sleep for a long time.
Well anyway your story is great and really, really emotional. How you describes the feelings of Matt and Syrren is very well done. All in all you have done a good job with describing the emotions, the area and the different situations. Speaking about emotions, I found the part prettey awesome where Syrren was waiting that Matt came out of the gab and imagining how he would ask him about human life very and how Syrren is thinking about human behaviour.
I am glad that the two are becomming friends and when I look at them now I could imagine that they also could become a loving couple later . Well I well see whether I am right. And nice easteregg when Syrren says to Matt that he do not know what he has done last summer .

No idea why I didn't reply to your comment earlier.

Thanks, buddy. I am really glad that you like how I described the emitions and all. And for the easteregg - I didn't write that on purpose. I realized it later when I read it again where that came from.
Thanks for the comment.

Maybe you just hadn't seen it. Can always happen to anyone

Thanks for understanding. I try to answer to all the comments I get, at least the recent ones.

That was really...well Fantastic. I loved how you described everything, from characters to scenery. The character traits i also like, they are both really different characters, but yet at the same time, they are the same. They are friendly, curious, caring, and all out awesome. I also like how you started this story out, the intro was like a magnet, it pulls you right in. The only thing i didn't like is that you didn't describe what Matt looks like. But otherwise, it was an all out enjoyable read!

Since this is a review, i am gonna rate it.

I give this chapter a 9 1/2 out of 10!

I'll read the other chapters later, got some stuff to do. But don't stop writing, I really enjoyed this and i don't want you to ever stop writing.

Hehe, you are allready the second person here that points that out, that I missed to describe how Matt looks. Well I plan now on putting that into the 4th chapter, since I didn't want to change the earlier ones.
And of course I won't stop that series, I got everything allready planned, all the ideas are allready there, just missed sometimes the motivation and very often the time to write them down. But when I finish my test tommorrow I will continue with the 4th chapter and hopefully finish it before the end of the year.

I can't wait to read and catch up

That's great to hear you are that enthusiatic.

I'm always enthusiastic about reading when it is a great story!

That is really nice from you to say that.

I can't lie though, so i had to say the truth

omg im such a picky reader and i loved this... i wish i had a dragon friend o wait i do:D hi MTT3

Hehe, thanks.

dont mention it bro^^

You are welcome.

Wow, thanks I am glad you like it. To be honest when I uploaded it I was worried it was too little emitional. Thanks for telling me I was wrong.

Yay, thanks. Just please don't distribute it somewhere else, will you? I want it to stay on FA only.

Thanks, just wanted to make sure.

*blushes* Thanks

It's a really cool concept so far. You're really good at giving things just enough description to make a mental image and not bore us (like some people I know that go in depth on pointless things lol) Other than a few grammar errors, I don't see anything wrong with this story. Of course the end bit is adorable lol

Wow, thanks. ^.=.^ I am so glad that people tell me that the description is just right.

And thanks again, just for being so nice and commenting.

Interesting start, even if the grammar was a little weird at some spots. I think you could benefit from some word trimming but I quite liked how you didn't spend overmuch time at describing characters. The idea of reading the next chapters didn't feel like a chore when I was finished with this one.

Hehe, thanks. You have to know english is not my mother tongue, so it is very likely that there are parts where somebody, whose mother tongue is english, would begin to wonder what this should mean.

Thanks anyway for commenting, buddy. Great that you like it.

It's everybody's dream to wander trough a cave and find a beautiful dragon like that... I would have probably been all over him in minutes. And get eaten for that.

Hehe, thanks. I guess a lot of people would love this to happen. And for the 'being all over him and getting eaten for that.' Don't worry, Syrren would never eat a human, you would have probably been secured under one of his strong paws until you calmed down again. ^.=.^

I only had time to read this chapter for now (at my lunch break at work), but you've set up an interesting story. I'll try to read other chapters next time I get free =)

Thanks buddy. Take you al the time you need for reading it. I am glad you like my story and I always like some comments from my readers what they think about it.

Thanks, cannot wait for your comments. Maybe you can just tell me what you liked best of the story, like if I am doing enough details in the emotions or so.

It's a good story Matt! It is as descriptive, shows emotions well, and is easy to understand and picture. I did not realize English was not your primary language. I looked at your page again more closely. Germany, correct?

As another poster said, there are slight grammatical and phraseology tweaks you may need if you publish it. (And the little <?> symbols...Must be a coding issue?) They do not detract from the story, however. Your meaning came through clearly.

I love the name "Syrren." Is it said as "Sigh-ren," or "Sir-ren?"

I'll favorite this so I may read the other chapters when possible. Is there particular advice or feedback you wish?

Hmmm, I don't really look for a specific feedback, any feedback is fine to me. Telling me where you find horrible spelling or grammar mistakes would be fine, but also stuff about the plot, where you for example would have liked to know more about it and so.

And for the language, that is the German-speaking group, not the Germany-group. I am Austrian.

Okay. I'll keep that in mind.

One little nagging detail. What happened to the animal he rescued in the beginning? Just a little loose end. Maybe you sew that up in ch. 3 or 4? I need to read them still, sorry. Perhaps he and Syrrin can release it together, sort of as a bonding thing?

My apologies...I didn't know there was another group for just spoken language. I figured it was a country-site. Forgive me? Please? *hatchling eyes*

holy batman great wall of text!
i'll give it a red and cmment back

*blushes* I know, great wall of letters. I hope you can climb over it.

I couldn't finished it, i felt it was too long for a single chapter.

yeah there is some grammar issues, so if you got someone to proof-read this it'd probably seem better.

i read kind until matt had the drink. i felt that you should stick more clearly to one of the characters thoughts. since at one point i thought i was reading the dragons thought but it was matts.

lets see for the actual story based on what i've read. i would of like more of an intro than just, guy releasing a recovered fox. also a bit of back story to the world would of been nice, that way could know some information. So in a nutshell here more of an intro to matt as a character and a bit of back story to the world or something. but this is just my opinion.

lets see, i spent about 40 mins reading what i did. i felt like it's too long. like i feel a good point would of been for a first chapter would f been to end it with the dragon waking up, that way it's a cliff hanger and keeps the reader want to see what happens next.

hmm there are a few more things i could talk about, but i'll leave it till later. i probably won't finish reading this or the other chapters

Just finished reading it now, it's really quite well described even if there are a few repeated words but hardly any, nicely done matt especially for your first chapter

Wow, thanks.

You cannot imagine how hard it was to convince myself to post it, I guess I've been talking to myself for nearly a week before I posted it, so unsure was I about it.

Great you like it.

Your welcome.

Ah I can understand how hard that can be, but its good that you finally convinced yourself to post it hehe.

I did very much so

Whew! Finally got round to it. Nightmare on this frigging DS.

That was a very interesting story. I loved that thing about Syrren being telepathic, very original. I was a bit unsure at first, because I thought you could have done more description (I have so much OCD about description), but you totally made up for it in the describing through their speech. You also made it really easy to empathise with the two and what they were thinking/feeling. Really well done. Read the rest tomorrow (after I've finished the second part of my story. ugh).

P.S. Some grammar issues, but yeah, you can deal with that later.

Thanks buddy. ^^ I know there are quite some mistakes in it, since it was my first try and I didn't correct it until now. ^^

I really love the story. It's enjoyable and rather creative. How he met a real dragon that's usually only found on papyrus, how he met one that has broken the people's mindset about dragons or so.

It's amazing.

Thanks, I hope you will enjoy the other chapters too.

Even if I couldn't due to age filter

Oh, still that young? ^^ You wanna wait until you are old enough or should I send you the stories via email?

Via email :3

Nice story, really digging your writing style.

Thanks my friend. This means a lot to me.

Ok this really sent shivers down my spine because it is exactly what I would have thought dragons to be like, act . This really touched my heart *hugs* keep up the good work Matt

Hehe, thanks. I will try to finish me next chapter as soon as possible, have been neglecting my story series way too long. *Blushes*

I like this story so far. You are very descriptive, and I like that the relationship between Syrren and Matt develops as the chapter progresses.

Thanks Buddy. It means a lot to me that you are reading it and giving me your thoughts Will look forward to more comments from you.

I liked how you took the time to develop the relationship between the two. Unlike most stories that just rush to bring the characters together, yours presents a more believable scenario as to how long it would take them to grow comfortable with one another. I'm looking forward to reading the next parts!

Thanks for your lovely comment.

Yeah, I like to develope such things slowly, as realistic as possible. I don't like to rush things, but let it happen at a pace that it has a deeper impact, both the charackters and also the readers ^^

I like how you shifted the tone of the story from one of uncertainty and fear, to a warmer, more trusting tone towards the end of the story. The characterization is great and I like how you slowly develop the relationship of Syrren and Matt over the course of the story as Matt delves to overcome his fear and mistrust of Syrren. Your great at expressing the emotions of the characters and this made it easy for me to connect to the highly dynamic personalities you created for Syrren and Matt. This Makes your characters Matt and Syrren extremely believable. I like how dynamic they are and the emotional examples you provide, like Syrrens fascination / wonder for Matts I Phone, give the characters depth. Overall it was an extremely good, fascinating, and engaging read. You really have a way with words and are a true wordsmith

Wow, thanks for the hig praise, tht is really kind of you. I am trying my best to write stories from the point of view of the charackters, what they think, feel, see etc. I always liked stories with a good depth myself.