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!! This is the original version of the story, before the final edits. While this version was updated a couple of times, I figured I'd keep it up to show the changes in the final. !!
Consider this to be the long version of the dream from the comic.
I had a couple of ideas last night on how I'd like to expand (heh) the story a bit, and I decided to put it to paper... or, bits, I guess in this case.
I was intending to do this as a short 1-2 page entry, and I got a little carried away. ^^;
This is the first non-documentation thing I've written since college lit, I believe, so please be gentle with the criticisms. If you like it please let me know, and I'll look at maybe doing more.
Thanks to
for some corrections.
Also, I've uploaded I think 7-8 different revisions in the past couple of days. Next time I'll do a bit more proof reading before posting I think. ^^;
"There. Now he's trapped in a book I wrote. A crummy world of plot holes and spelling errors." - Fry, Futurama
Consider this to be the long version of the dream from the comic.
I had a couple of ideas last night on how I'd like to expand (heh) the story a bit, and I decided to put it to paper... or, bits, I guess in this case.
I was intending to do this as a short 1-2 page entry, and I got a little carried away. ^^;
This is the first non-documentation thing I've written since college lit, I believe, so please be gentle with the criticisms. If you like it please let me know, and I'll look at maybe doing more.
Thanks to
for some corrections.Also, I've uploaded I think 7-8 different revisions in the past couple of days. Next time I'll do a bit more proof reading before posting I think. ^^;
"There. Now he's trapped in a book I wrote. A crummy world of plot holes and spelling errors." - Fry, Futurama
Category Story / Fat Furs
Species Housecat
Size 50 x 50px
File Size 23.5 kB
11th graf: "Her breasts blocking her view of exactly how much damage had been done."
14th graf: "The small pot belly quickly inflating into a spare tire."
16th graf: "Glancing back she could see the remaining food bobbing angrily, but not appearing to attempt to follow her." Comma issues and end could be tighter.
21st graf: "...Kate could feel her pants and sleeves tearing as her legs began to exceed the capacity and stretchiness of her kakis and shirt."
Second to last: "She burped quietly, tasting last nights turkey."
Just go ahead and hide this comment once you make the fixes.
14th graf: "The small pot belly quickly inflating into a spare tire."
16th graf: "Glancing back she could see the remaining food bobbing angrily, but not appearing to attempt to follow her." Comma issues and end could be tighter.
21st graf: "...Kate could feel her pants and sleeves tearing as her legs began to exceed the capacity and stretchiness of her kakis and shirt."
Second to last: "She burped quietly, tasting last nights turkey."
Just go ahead and hide this comment once you make the fixes.
"We're going to dream, then we're going to go to sleep in that dream, then we'll wake up from that dream into an alternate reality inside the first dream, where we'll go to sleep again, have two dreams about each other's dreams, hook up with a rhino peddling pirated CDs, link back into the first dream, and be back before the movie's over."
http://s-ak.buzzfed.com/static/imag.....0261153-25.jpg
what about this one
the entire movie in four panels
what about this one
the entire movie in four panels
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