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The very day after his defeat by the Dragon Warrior, a battered and injured Tai Lung is taken in by Master Shifu. Several of the Five, most notably Tigress, think he is out of his mind, while Po has faith in his enemy. Can a father undo his past mistakes? Perhaps, if the snow leopard can be taught...
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Finally finished,and it only took me two whole days of days of reading.
I really like how you gave tai lung,and the other characters of course,a happy ending. The best part of this chapter was tai lung meeting his biological family.i would give the entire story a 10/10.
now this leads to a very important question since this is the last part:Will there be a sequel?
PLS give the answer i want pls.
I really like how you gave tai lung,and the other characters of course,a happy ending. The best part of this chapter was tai lung meeting his biological family.i would give the entire story a 10/10.
now this leads to a very important question since this is the last part:Will there be a sequel?
PLS give the answer i want pls.
Well I am afraid the answer is yes and no. After all the work I put into this and how long it turned out to be, I'm not doing a long and involved sequel--I've pretty much said all I wanted to say and that needed to be said.
However, I am slowly working on a series of brief vignettes which revisit this fic and its characters. They involve things like Tai and Tigress's wedding, Po and Jia's romance, Po meeting his parents, Tai and Tigress's cubs, Crane and Mei Ling and Jia's travels across China, and various backstories we didn't get to delve into much--like the Wu Sisters' mother and father, Vachir and his son, the Emperor, Chao and the old masters, and even the tyrannical Emperor who started all this.
So when I get that done (however long that takes) you'll get some more relatively short works there which will explain some things and tie up some loose ends. Beyond that, though, that's it.
However, I am slowly working on a series of brief vignettes which revisit this fic and its characters. They involve things like Tai and Tigress's wedding, Po and Jia's romance, Po meeting his parents, Tai and Tigress's cubs, Crane and Mei Ling and Jia's travels across China, and various backstories we didn't get to delve into much--like the Wu Sisters' mother and father, Vachir and his son, the Emperor, Chao and the old masters, and even the tyrannical Emperor who started all this.
So when I get that done (however long that takes) you'll get some more relatively short works there which will explain some things and tie up some loose ends. Beyond that, though, that's it.
And here's the start of those vignettes, as well as some short scenes!
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6204355.....ferent_Lessons
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6242740.....esson_Shuffles
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6204355.....ferent_Lessons
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6242740.....esson_Shuffles
*smiles and hugs* Thanks...I worked really hard on it and I'm glad to know people here are slowly discovering it and liking it. :)
Stay tuned...if things go well, it may come to pass that this story will be available in hard copy format, complete with cover art and illustrations.
Stay tuned...if things go well, it may come to pass that this story will be available in hard copy format, complete with cover art and illustrations.
LOL! What an appropriate thing to say about a KFP story...
Well, clearly I was a bit obsessed myself to write something this long and involved! And well...maybe someday I'll be published and win awards, all I really care about right now is telling the stories I want to tell and having people like and enjoy them.
And I have managed to put up the first few vignettes, and some short scenes, on FF.net, if you want to check them out.
Well, clearly I was a bit obsessed myself to write something this long and involved! And well...maybe someday I'll be published and win awards, all I really care about right now is telling the stories I want to tell and having people like and enjoy them.
And I have managed to put up the first few vignettes, and some short scenes, on FF.net, if you want to check them out.
Just happened to be on. :P And here:
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6204355.....ferent_Lessons
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6242740.....esson_Shuffles
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6204355.....ferent_Lessons
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6242740.....esson_Shuffles
earlier i was thinking i would ask your permission to recommend this to dreamworks as a second movie without of corse the ehhh romance n' stuff but the storyline with tai lung coming back to good and fight off chao and Po's friendship helping him... but it wasnt to be... they are already making a second one... the storyline doesnt sound much different... exept the giant part about tai lung lol
ur awsome peace out
ur awsome peace out
Well you can read them in any order, doesn't matter.
And uhhhh...not only is my story far too dark and disturbing in addition to the romance, but no company ever takes suggestions for scripts from other writers, let alone fanfic writers. To do so they would have to pay said writers, which they usually don't want to do, and if they don't pay them they'd be accused of stealing those writers' ideas and could be sued--which is why they don't even look at other work in the first place.
But yes, they are making sequels already, and Tai Lung as far as we can tell won't be appearing because apparently Dream Works (like Pixar) has decided that no matter how multilayered they make their villains to keep them from being flat, or how much potential they have for good, villains need to stay villains and die, unredeemed. :/
And uhhhh...not only is my story far too dark and disturbing in addition to the romance, but no company ever takes suggestions for scripts from other writers, let alone fanfic writers. To do so they would have to pay said writers, which they usually don't want to do, and if they don't pay them they'd be accused of stealing those writers' ideas and could be sued--which is why they don't even look at other work in the first place.
But yes, they are making sequels already, and Tai Lung as far as we can tell won't be appearing because apparently Dream Works (like Pixar) has decided that no matter how multilayered they make their villains to keep them from being flat, or how much potential they have for good, villains need to stay villains and die, unredeemed. :/
My friend, you should go into the movie business. You didn't just write a great story, you wrote a bloody good script to what would be an awesome movie, and you've no doubt satisfied all of us who had wished for more of Tai Lung (he had such potential, it's a real shame we probably won't see him again).
By the way, any chance we'll get a closer look at what hilarious insanity transpired during Tigress'es pregnancy? The hints you gave to such things in your other stories make me eagerly wish for such a gift.
By the way, any chance we'll get a closer look at what hilarious insanity transpired during Tigress'es pregnancy? The hints you gave to such things in your other stories make me eagerly wish for such a gift.
*blushes* Thanks, that is really high praise. And well, there are a few similarities between my villain and the one in KFP2, so perhaps someone at Dream Works agrees with you and just took what was workable for a PG movie.
Yeah, too bad about Tai Lung...if he shows up at all it will likely be in the TV series where he'll just be a recurring one-note villain. :/
I don't have any specific plans for the pregnancy, though the wedding and stuff with the cubs are or will be in the sequel vignettes I am writing. Maybe I might do something with that...I do know there will be a shuffle with the birth scene...
Yeah, too bad about Tai Lung...if he shows up at all it will likely be in the TV series where he'll just be a recurring one-note villain. :/
I don't have any specific plans for the pregnancy, though the wedding and stuff with the cubs are or will be in the sequel vignettes I am writing. Maybe I might do something with that...I do know there will be a shuffle with the birth scene...
By the way, thanks so much for not killing off Tai Lung (yeah, I doubt that ever occured to you, but bear with me). I've seen one too many stories where a former villain makes a big, soul-stirring change and has everyone rooting for him, only to be killed off at the end as some "final redemption" gimmick. Maybe the author is trying to make a point in doing such a thing, but I think it's wrong, so I appreciate you for not falling into that.
*chuckles* I would never do that--I like Tai Lung too much! Also as you said that sort of thing has been done to death, no pun intended, and indeed I would much rather show it is possible to redeem oneself, do good, and then get to reap the rewards of it. What can I say, I am an idealist, at least in some ways. Or to put it in TV Tropes terms, I believe Redemption Earns Life, rather than Equals Death.
Don't know if you're still around or interested, but in case you never saw it, here's the shuffle I wrote regarding Tigress's birth scene: Different Lesson Shuffles (it's the first one).
I didn't do much with the actual pregnancy, though things related to Tigress's cravings did come up during the fourth vignette.
I didn't do much with the actual pregnancy, though things related to Tigress's cravings did come up during the fourth vignette.
This is an example of a very long, very good fanfiction that has all the attributes of a good novel. Part of what made it so great was how you stayed true to the characters: the fact that I could imagine the voice actors for each character reading the lines without it sounding odd or out of place made the comedy funnier and the drama more effective. Aside from the massive character development of Tai Lung and Tigress, one of my favorite characters in the story, the one I think you perfectly nailed, was Oogway. Even though we saw him for so little of the movie, he still left a lasting impression as a character we really wanted to see more of. He shares many qualities with other comic sages, like Yoda and, to a certain extent, Iroh, and both his wisdom and his sense of humor were exactly as I imagined him. I really believed how he understood and regretted his mistakes, while somehow remaining funny and playful even though he went through so much emotional turmoil. I also loved what you did with the Wu sisters, and how you developed Chun and Jia, as Azula was really the only one that was well-rounded to such a degree in the source material. Xiu's paralysis seemed fitting, as being trapped in the prison of her own mind was really the worst fate that could happen to such an insane psychopath. That part in the last chapter, with Mr. Ping awkwardly seeing Tai Lung give Po an orange was perfect, as James Hong makes everything funnier. How you teased the various shippers was a bit of a surprise, but a funny and welcome one.
The spiritual nature of the story made sense, as a certain amount of magic or supernatural elements were hinted at in the movie. I like how you incorporated the bending of the elements in a way that fit with the mythology, and you used it sparingly in the story so it still felt special and important when it happened. You strongly connected each element in a way that fit with the personalities of each character. (Tai Lung firebending with his tail was one of my favorite parts.) The action scenes were all well-written, and I admired the fact that you were willing to injure the heroes, often in serious ways, instead of having them be protected by invincible plot armor like other writers do. I still haven't gotten around to reading most of Luna's stories, and they are my next order of business, along with picking up the Art of Kung Fu Panda from my local library. Thank you for a wonderful experience, and I wish you the best.
The spiritual nature of the story made sense, as a certain amount of magic or supernatural elements were hinted at in the movie. I like how you incorporated the bending of the elements in a way that fit with the mythology, and you used it sparingly in the story so it still felt special and important when it happened. You strongly connected each element in a way that fit with the personalities of each character. (Tai Lung firebending with his tail was one of my favorite parts.) The action scenes were all well-written, and I admired the fact that you were willing to injure the heroes, often in serious ways, instead of having them be protected by invincible plot armor like other writers do. I still haven't gotten around to reading most of Luna's stories, and they are my next order of business, along with picking up the Art of Kung Fu Panda from my local library. Thank you for a wonderful experience, and I wish you the best.
*blushes and smiles, taking a bow* Thank you for taking the time to read it--I know it's not for the faint of heart!--and giving it such thoughtful analysis along the way. I am especially tickled pink you love the dialogue and feel it is all in character, because for the longest time as a writer, dialogue has been the thing that always eluded me. In the end, the answer was the most obvious one of course: to actually listen to how people talk. But I think the influence of dialogue in my favorite writers (particularly David Eddings) and movies also aided me in this. And in the case of KFP, I actually did stop to read back everything I wrote in the voices of the characters (or my best approximations of them). That's probably why it turned out so well.
Oogway was a bitch to write, but in the end very rewarding. In the end I had to dispense with a lot of his riddling and playful, non sequitur speech, simply because I just couldn't think of enough silliness, vapidness, and profound wisdom--and since I needed him to be Mr. Exposition a lot, that also made him have to be more direct and straightforward. But I was at least able to include enough callbacks and character tics to make him funny and kooky. You may have noticed I did actually include some turns of phrase or outright quotes from Iroh; I also included some of Dumbledore.
I liked Mai and Ty Lee a lot, but I agree they were underutilized in the show. Though they had funny and awesome moments, neither really flourished except in "The Beach" and "The Boiling Rock", so I had a lot of fun expanding on them. Though obviously I focused more on Jia than Chun. (Chun does get some further treatment in the sequel vignettes I wrote. Perhaps I should direct you to those? ^_^ ) I originally intended to just kill Xiu, but I thought having a villain not die was more interesting, and the manner of it was of course inspired by several sources you probably picked up on.
You're right: I love James Hong, and he does make everything funnier. I just wish I could have used Ping more. He too appears in the vignettes, however!
I always intended to make my version of KFP more mystical and supernatural since the kung fu genre often is. (A guilty pleasure of mine has always been Big Trouble in Little China.) And with what Dream Works is doing in KFP3, as well as various events in the TV series, it seems their writers agree with such a depiction. Originally I didn't intend to use the bending since I didn't want to be even more like Avatar than I already was (it's obviously an awesome series, and it has the same kind of devotion to research, world-building, art, and epicness that KFP has, but it deserves to stand on its own merits and I didn't want to use it as a crutch to make my story better), but I eventually found I needed it for Tai Lung's lessons to help him control his rage, and once I did that I couldn't very well leave it a wasted plot. Plus I found it just worked to make the fights more amazing without negating the actual kung fu. Hence why I saved it for the last two fights in the novel, especially the final battle.
Despite the fact the first movie was, well, cartoonish in its physics, and that kung fu films in general often are not realistic in how they handle injuries, I wanted to make the world feel more real. Not to the point everyone was getting badly hurt and taken out of commission every time they turned around, but enough to give that added sense of danger and impact at the right moments.
Luna's stories don't perhaps go into things you've mentioned as much as I might like (plot armor does appear on occasion, there is very little mysticism until near the end of her series, and some of her fight scenes aren't as detailed as they could be), but she was the one who inspired me in terms of characterization, a few plot points, and certainly snark, and she also helped me a lot with fight choreography, so I think she's well worth the read. Art of KFP is amazing, and I do hope you can find it--then you can look at the images of the lost places and characters, and get a better image of the ones I used. ^_^
Again, thanks so much!
Oogway was a bitch to write, but in the end very rewarding. In the end I had to dispense with a lot of his riddling and playful, non sequitur speech, simply because I just couldn't think of enough silliness, vapidness, and profound wisdom--and since I needed him to be Mr. Exposition a lot, that also made him have to be more direct and straightforward. But I was at least able to include enough callbacks and character tics to make him funny and kooky. You may have noticed I did actually include some turns of phrase or outright quotes from Iroh; I also included some of Dumbledore.
I liked Mai and Ty Lee a lot, but I agree they were underutilized in the show. Though they had funny and awesome moments, neither really flourished except in "The Beach" and "The Boiling Rock", so I had a lot of fun expanding on them. Though obviously I focused more on Jia than Chun. (Chun does get some further treatment in the sequel vignettes I wrote. Perhaps I should direct you to those? ^_^ ) I originally intended to just kill Xiu, but I thought having a villain not die was more interesting, and the manner of it was of course inspired by several sources you probably picked up on.
You're right: I love James Hong, and he does make everything funnier. I just wish I could have used Ping more. He too appears in the vignettes, however!
I always intended to make my version of KFP more mystical and supernatural since the kung fu genre often is. (A guilty pleasure of mine has always been Big Trouble in Little China.) And with what Dream Works is doing in KFP3, as well as various events in the TV series, it seems their writers agree with such a depiction. Originally I didn't intend to use the bending since I didn't want to be even more like Avatar than I already was (it's obviously an awesome series, and it has the same kind of devotion to research, world-building, art, and epicness that KFP has, but it deserves to stand on its own merits and I didn't want to use it as a crutch to make my story better), but I eventually found I needed it for Tai Lung's lessons to help him control his rage, and once I did that I couldn't very well leave it a wasted plot. Plus I found it just worked to make the fights more amazing without negating the actual kung fu. Hence why I saved it for the last two fights in the novel, especially the final battle.
Despite the fact the first movie was, well, cartoonish in its physics, and that kung fu films in general often are not realistic in how they handle injuries, I wanted to make the world feel more real. Not to the point everyone was getting badly hurt and taken out of commission every time they turned around, but enough to give that added sense of danger and impact at the right moments.
Luna's stories don't perhaps go into things you've mentioned as much as I might like (plot armor does appear on occasion, there is very little mysticism until near the end of her series, and some of her fight scenes aren't as detailed as they could be), but she was the one who inspired me in terms of characterization, a few plot points, and certainly snark, and she also helped me a lot with fight choreography, so I think she's well worth the read. Art of KFP is amazing, and I do hope you can find it--then you can look at the images of the lost places and characters, and get a better image of the ones I used. ^_^
Again, thanks so much!
Haven't heard from you in some time, and since I did manage to finish the vignettes and shuffles I wondered if you had as well.
Also, after KFP3, I think it's safe to say that spirituality and the supernatural are even more of a thing in the KFP universe than we could have imagined, and what I did in ADL fits right in. ^_^
Also, after KFP3, I think it's safe to say that spirituality and the supernatural are even more of a thing in the KFP universe than we could have imagined, and what I did in ADL fits right in. ^_^
As the vignettes aren't on here for me to comment on directly (I'm reading them right now), was Mr. Ping inventing take-out a reference to Iroh inventing bubble-tea in one of the comics?
I am also blown away by the amount of research you had to do in order to describe a high-class Chinese wedding. It all seems sufficiently complicated and ceremonial, so good job. I was surprised that I understood the reference used for the calligraphy joke, as that was in the five or so minutes of the movie that I randomly watched while flipping through channels. The fact that I could tell it was going to be made at Crane's expense eventually didn't make it any less funny, and I had to restrain my laughter to keep concerned family members from checking up on me. If you don't mind, I'll be making any further comments on the continuation of the series here.
I am also blown away by the amount of research you had to do in order to describe a high-class Chinese wedding. It all seems sufficiently complicated and ceremonial, so good job. I was surprised that I understood the reference used for the calligraphy joke, as that was in the five or so minutes of the movie that I randomly watched while flipping through channels. The fact that I could tell it was going to be made at Crane's expense eventually didn't make it any less funny, and I had to restrain my laughter to keep concerned family members from checking up on me. If you don't mind, I'll be making any further comments on the continuation of the series here.
That's perfectly fine. And nope, since I don't think I've actually read that comic. I just thought it hilarious to have something as ubiquitous as take-out be invented by our resident noodles-for-brains cook.
I was shocked myself how much goes into it, especially compared to Western weddings, which while they do have certain traditions and superstitions are far less complicated and more straightforward (for the most part).
Not having actually seen "Sex and the City" myself, I have to be amused you managed to see that moment even only by channel-flipping. And of course I had to pick on Crane, he's such an easy target. And I think calligraphy had the most fun euphemistic meanings of anything I could have chosen. That part of the scene really wrote itself.
I was shocked myself how much goes into it, especially compared to Western weddings, which while they do have certain traditions and superstitions are far less complicated and more straightforward (for the most part).
Not having actually seen "Sex and the City" myself, I have to be amused you managed to see that moment even only by channel-flipping. And of course I had to pick on Crane, he's such an easy target. And I think calligraphy had the most fun euphemistic meanings of anything I could have chosen. That part of the scene really wrote itself.
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