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One click of a button by the colonel, and the image changed.
This time, the image showed a tortoise, just as gigantic, humanoid, bulky and showing off as the rooster.
"This one has been spotted roughly simultaneously at Baton Rouge, Louisiana. Once again, it's just showing off, and the army was sent as a precaution."
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SpiderDaSquirrel
Tortoise Kaiju © me
One click of a button by the colonel, and the image changed.
This time, the image showed a tortoise, just as gigantic, humanoid, bulky and showing off as the rooster.
"This one has been spotted roughly simultaneously at Baton Rouge, Louisiana. Once again, it's just showing off, and the army was sent as a precaution."
Art by
SpiderDaSquirrelTortoise Kaiju © me
Category Artwork (Digital) / Macro / Micro
Species Kaiju / Giant Monster
Size 1200 x 1408px
File Size 469.1 kB
Listed in Folders
Hey there! Here I am, back and ready for the next chapter of the Briefing on the sudden Kaiju Rising! You see what I did there? Ha ha! Anyway, yes, onto the second Briefing!
Now, this one, well, to say it's a short chapter, he he, well, that would be putting it mildly, so I guess this'll be a short review! However, I'm sure I can still give suggestions and constructive feedback!
So, there's really not much to say about this one. The writing's short, but it's more than sufficient, because it does kind of fit the overall tone of the situation nicely. It's short and direct, which is what you'd expect if that were happening. You do have that working against you for lengthening it. I'm sure you could find some way, some details to throw in, which I'd encourage because it would be a good opportunity to show and not tell for this tortoise's personality, even if, ironically, it's being told to the soldiers, and by extension, us. Plus, we do still gleam some very interesting information from the few lines there are! We know that this Kaiju appeared in Baton Rouge at about the same time as the Rooster - that can't be a coincidence!
I would like to ask though, you selected Boise as the location because of its connection with chicken farming. Did you choose Baton Rouge for a particular reason? Is it because it's near a major river, or was it just a place you happened to choose? Regardless, again, it's nice to see places that aren't used as often!
Other than that, I confess, there's little else I can offer you, because I just can't really think of anything I'm afraid. I do have a little bit of advice for the last line though - I think you mean 'as a precaution' rather than 'for precaution'. Other than that though, there's nothing that jumps out at me!
Overall, a very short chapter, but it does its job and it does it admirably. I'll see you for the next chapter and the next review, until then, take care!
Now, this one, well, to say it's a short chapter, he he, well, that would be putting it mildly, so I guess this'll be a short review! However, I'm sure I can still give suggestions and constructive feedback!
So, there's really not much to say about this one. The writing's short, but it's more than sufficient, because it does kind of fit the overall tone of the situation nicely. It's short and direct, which is what you'd expect if that were happening. You do have that working against you for lengthening it. I'm sure you could find some way, some details to throw in, which I'd encourage because it would be a good opportunity to show and not tell for this tortoise's personality, even if, ironically, it's being told to the soldiers, and by extension, us. Plus, we do still gleam some very interesting information from the few lines there are! We know that this Kaiju appeared in Baton Rouge at about the same time as the Rooster - that can't be a coincidence!
I would like to ask though, you selected Boise as the location because of its connection with chicken farming. Did you choose Baton Rouge for a particular reason? Is it because it's near a major river, or was it just a place you happened to choose? Regardless, again, it's nice to see places that aren't used as often!
Other than that, I confess, there's little else I can offer you, because I just can't really think of anything I'm afraid. I do have a little bit of advice for the last line though - I think you mean 'as a precaution' rather than 'for precaution'. Other than that though, there's nothing that jumps out at me!
Overall, a very short chapter, but it does its job and it does it admirably. I'll see you for the next chapter and the next review, until then, take care!
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