Whoa. The hairs on my arm are standing on end. It's a vivid and subtly powerful scene. It has an aftertaste of sadness, too, though I'm not exactly sure why.

You know, I think this very nearly works as is. The reader is left to imagine what the object is and what it's importance might be. And that's not a bad thing. =)

It's also great to see Timothy again. I've missed him.

Really? Hum, as for the sadness I was working from the idea that the ghost cat was staying there waiting for its original owner to come cake, waiting forever until Timothy came along. And it was going to be a yoyo. Two little gifts for Timothy, one pet only he could see and an ancient toy.

Hey, this is good. Still, you seem unsatisfied with it. I think this story is enjoyable, even if it doesn't give much more about Timothy or Enzo. Just a slice in their life, and the cat. The ending seems odd, though. Maybe this is your intent, to leave the odd item unidentified, an open thread, for the future.

Anyway, I enjoyed reading this. Good work.

No the ending is simply incomplete. The beginning is three weeks old and I just can't get the time and motivation to continue it anymore. I had folded last weeks prompt - the toy- into it and had much more in mind for this weeks but...

Brilliant use of the cat. Especially the line, "The cat wasn't in the frame." It was simple, but told so much. I really liked the ending too. It leaves you anxious, wondering just what did Enzo find. Hopefully you'll find time and motivation again once everything settles out.

Show don't tell, right? The ending was just where I left off about a week ago.

Would you like me to add this to the archives for those two prompts?

Sorry, I simply forgot to put the link to your journal. Thanks PT

and what was it?????????


not fair not fair

*gives him a big hug...

enjoyed it as always...

V.

Thanks.

By the way, why so late on this one? Are you that far behind?

I am so far behind I can't see daylight...

*smiles...

work/life/all of that...

*hugs...

V.

there are a few tired souls even farther behind *smiles weakly*

still, an interesting little slice life and ... after. Thank you for sharing, Timothy seems to bring out ... interesting things

Thanks fellow tired kitty.