First off, yay spaces between paragraphs! This story was much easier to read then the first one.

I always read the tags before I start a story and yours scared me slightly. These three especially: 'Gay', 'love', 'romance'. I'm not into that kind of stuff. I was honestly thinking that it was going to be a massive sex-fest that was going to give me nightmares for weeks.

Thankfully, it wasn't. Sure, homophobes will despise the story, but it wasn't overwhelming 'gay'(I'm saying this as a label, not as a derogatory term.). I could easily tell they were gay, but it wasn't overdone to the point where I would throw my computer across the room and crawl under a table and hide. So, thank you for keeping it clean and readable for people like me.

I noticed something very interesting about your writing. You use 2 periods instead of 3 when doing a long pause. I've never noticed someone do that before. It isn't wrong, just unique.

Do you have Microsoft Word or another spell check program? When I opened the document, I saw lots of red lines that could have easily been fixed with a right click. Your sense of spelling is quite good as I could still tell what everything was. For example, some of the misspelled words were 'familiaralities' or ' distrought '. I would highly suggest getting a spell checker because it makes the story easier to read and much more professional.

I don't think Sven freaked out enough when he found out that Myles was gay. (Myles is also the last name of my gay friend. Coincidence? I think not.) Sven's has had his whole life brought up on certain traditions, and Myles is breaking them. Even though they're best friends, Sven would still flip out. In fact, I honestly think Sven would freak out more. Think of it this way. Which would be more surprising: A guy you know for 5 months turning out to be gay, or the person you've been best friends for your whole life turns out to be gay?

My favorite scene that you wrote was where Myles was making the belt for Tobi. At first I was like "BS!", but you were able to pull it off perfectly. It's great when a writer can write a scene where a character uses their own innovation. Plus, it made perfect sense as Myles had been living in the wild for his whole life. Though, I have to point out, wouldn't that sap stick to Tobi's pants and make the next morning's pee very uncomfortable as he couldn't take his shorts off?

Great writing. Keep it coming! :D

Thanks again for the feedback, I'm glad you took the time to read the next part! Thanks for the advice on starting new lines for the dialogues, I think that helped a lot.

That's why the tags are there, my friend. If you're not into same-sex relationships, then don't read it. I write as a way to express myself and I, being a homosexual, should feel free to write a story about two males in love, just as a heterosexual writer would. Also, I've found that the furry fandom is my own safe haven from harmful views and this fandom makes me feel more comfortable to be as I am, and it's the main reason I love being a part of the furry fandom. This site is about expressing your own creativity, and that's exactly what I'm doing.

I don't plan on writing a yiffy scene within this story, but even if there was one, you could easily skip over it to save yourself from the 'trauma'. Regardless, though you're not into this kind of stuff, I thank you for being brave and understanding about it, and continuing to read my story :3 It shows a very great amount of acceptance, and I thank you for not freaking out x3 Alos, there is no such thing as over-whelmingly gay, unless you could consider something as over-whelmingly straight.

When I write, I put a lot of my own personality into it. I find that varying the amount of period in dialog can have a big impact on how the reader imagines them talking. Thanks for finding it unique though! :3

I write all of my stories on my IPhone and I have spellchack turned off because of my unique Canadian lingo, it considers misspelled x3 Then I email it to myself and copy/paste it straight to Microsoft Word. I'll make an effort to go through it again for next time

You're right there, I could have added more in there. I'll go back and fix it in case I decide to do a final draft when it's all finished :3 Thanks for your input!

Hahaha x3 I was a bit skeptical about it myself :P I'm glad you thought it worked out anyhow, and haha yep! I'm sure he'll have an enjoyable time taking them off x3

Thanks again for the feedback and for continuing to read my story :3 It means a lot to me! I hope you continue to enjoy it ^^

Thanks again,
Dami