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A Big Bad Wolf Gets His Just Desserts (Part 12)
[[ This is part 12 of the series. It doesn't stand alone. Please read the prior parts first. ]]
The main course arrives at last! Our poor wolf, already so full, will have to become an eating machine to get through this one. Is he and his belly up to it?
And our wolf has an encounter of a rather spicy kind.
(Story contains conversations between furry and human, long loving descriptions of various foods, growing affections, and gluttony - lots and lots of gluttony!)
The main course arrives at last! Our poor wolf, already so full, will have to become an eating machine to get through this one. Is he and his belly up to it?
And our wolf has an encounter of a rather spicy kind.
(Story contains conversations between furry and human, long loving descriptions of various foods, growing affections, and gluttony - lots and lots of gluttony!)
Category Story / Inflation
Species Wolf
Size 78 x 120px
File Size 212.6 kB
Listed in Folders
Wow. Quite a few this time:
Third paragraph (not counting the one continuing from the previous page) on page 3... "She pushed he hands against it, but it pushed back even harder." Made a typo there with "he" instead of "her".
Then at the end of page 3... "She new poultry bones weren't good for the farm dogs." - Here you typed "new" instead of "knew".
First sentence of the third paragraph on page 4 starts with "He eyes widened in amazement." - another He/Her mixup.
Page 4, sixth paragraph.... "Surely that was more than a belly should hold, father than it should be able to swell!" - Just another typo. Were you in a hurry with this one? :P
I'm not sure if this was intentional, but it reads a little oddly on the 10th part of page 6 (including dialog 'cause I'm lazy)... "Just how much more could he force into it before burst?" - Perhaps you meant to say "before it burst".
Loved the description of the food and scents and all the many, many details. This is an awesome story, for sure.
Third paragraph (not counting the one continuing from the previous page) on page 3... "She pushed he hands against it, but it pushed back even harder." Made a typo there with "he" instead of "her".
Then at the end of page 3... "She new poultry bones weren't good for the farm dogs." - Here you typed "new" instead of "knew".
First sentence of the third paragraph on page 4 starts with "He eyes widened in amazement." - another He/Her mixup.
Page 4, sixth paragraph.... "Surely that was more than a belly should hold, father than it should be able to swell!" - Just another typo. Were you in a hurry with this one? :P
I'm not sure if this was intentional, but it reads a little oddly on the 10th part of page 6 (including dialog 'cause I'm lazy)... "Just how much more could he force into it before burst?" - Perhaps you meant to say "before it burst".
Loved the description of the food and scents and all the many, many details. This is an awesome story, for sure.
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