This is what I have worked on ever since the first year of high school. When the years went by, my skills at writing generally increased. I hope you read this and give me some feed back on what I did wrong. have a nice day :D :


Welcome young traveler to the new lands of the pyro and snow queens. The rulers of all things good and protects the week. Their two children and their brother, pyro prince Night, snow princess Snow, and the emperor of searing flames Uria. They four kingdoms are surrounded by nations and dynasties of similar powers. But two kingdoms are allies with the pyro and snow kingdom. Shadow kingdom whom is led by queen and goddess Shadow. The thunder kingdom is ruled by queen and goddess Thunder. The mutual kingdoms are the remaining powers. They decided to stay out of the conflict and live the way they wanted to. The sister of the thunder queen and goddess is the mighty lightning queen. When the thunder queen had a daughter, she named her Roxie. Lightning queen is the second most powerful kingdom there is in Immortal. The rain kingdom lies on the border of the hound tribe. They are the most brutal tribe ever. The rain queen is the sister of the snow queen. They never got along with each other, until the war broke out between the tribes and kingdoms. The dynasties never fight in this war. Mountain king, he rules in the upper most mountains in Immortal. He’s the pyro queen’s brother in power. Uria, the fire emperor banished the mountain king from the power of kingdoms. He is now the head leader of a vast dynasty call the mountain slide dynasty.

“My queen, the mountain dynasty is advancing to the rain kingdom. Apparently rain called for the reinforcements to aid her. The hound tribe is crushing there defenses and the pyro prince can’t sit still. He wants to lead the army to the rain kingdom for queen rains sakes.” The servant held up the scroll. The snow queen walked down from the holy throne and retrieved the scroll.

“I see. My sister can’t even muster up her own forces. She calls upon my sister’s brother for help. Even now our son wants action. Let our son lead the 13th renegade division to the rain kingdom. My own sister needs help from our own blood. Send a scroll to queen shadow, tell her nothing about the hound tribes attack.” The snow queen sat back on the holy throne. She called upon her noble knight to get the prince.

“Sir Lion, go get my son from his dorm. His time to lead our soldiers has come. And what ever you do, don’t tell my husband what’s going on. I think my son can handle him self in battle without his father. Needless to say that his sister snow wont approve of this. She will try at all costs to stop it. She might even call the 13 high nobles to even keep him home. My daughter is so protective over Night. She loves him with all her heart.” The snow queen gives out a big sigh. She’s wondering why snow would do such a thing. She got up off the holy throne once more and Sir Lion escorted her to Nights dorm. The pyro queen just woke up from a beautiful nap and stretched.

“How come you didn’t wake me up Amanda? Amanda where are you?” Ashley walked over to the throne and saw nothing. She’s always a lost fox without Amanda here. She sat in her throne right by Amanda’s. She then heard Amanda’s voice coming from the corridor by Nights room.

“Amanda there you are. How come you didn’t wake me up this morning?” Amanda was holding Night next to her side as she walked to Ashley. Ashley was a little bit scared of being alone since when she was a puppy. Now that Amanda is back, Ashley can calm down and relax.

“Hey Ashley, I was just waking the prince up from his nap. He wanted to be left a lone this morning but his sister snow wanted to play with him. She just can’t wait till he get’s up and stretch in the morning. How come you were looking for me my dear sister?”

“I wanted to ask you if you want to take a walk in the snow fall gardens with me. But since your son is up and my daughter is wide a wake lets all go as a family.”

“I think that will be such a swell idea Ashley.” Ashley and Amanda started giggling and blushing as the family started there walks. The pyro snow kingdom was such a big place. It will be a long walk in the snow fall garden.

“Well Amanda, what’s your plan for today?” Ashley said while playing with Nights hair. She always loved to play around with him. He doesn’t mind but only if snow wasn’t watching. Night wanted to go see aunt lightning, but Ashley wants’ him by her side.

“Well for today I’m taking a stroll in the garden, and then later Hannah and I are going to the royal castle in the ocean Jassiel. Then we are going to meet up with her husband and going to see mother and father in the heart content castle.” Amanda was lying straight threw her teeth, but Ashley didn’t pick it up. Ashley just smiled, and then blushed at a thought of the heart content castle.

“Now what on earth are you going to do in the hearts content castle? That place is for lovers and married couples.” Ashley said while hiding her face in her robe. She knew that Amanda was a naughty fox but she meant it. Amanda saw Hannah waiting at the snow fall garden’s flower bushes. Hannah picked one white rose and put it in her hair. Amanda nudged Ashley in the side and walked over to her.

“Hey there Amanda, how are you? Oh, and who is this?” Hannah bowed to Ashley; she smiled at her beautiful looks. Ashley love beauty on pretty girls like Hannah. Ashley picked her head up and looks into her eyes.

“My name is queen pyro but you can call me Ashley. I’m Amanda’s sister, but some times I’m like her mother.” Hannah smiled as she hugged her sister. Ashley doesn’t know it but Hannah is her sister. Ashley looked at Amanda smiling as Hannah put the white rose in her hair.

“Come with us to the hearts content castle Ashley. Emperor Uria wants to see all of us. Dad wanted me, crystal, Amanda, you, Kasey, Tracy, Stacy, and Mark to come to the hearts content castle. He’s waiting right now Amanda, Ashley please come to see mother and father, please?” Ashley looked into her sister’s sparkling eyes. She soon felt the pressure on her and smiled. Hannah smiled back and gave a huge hug to Ashley. Hannah called her husband over with the carriage. Hannah always had white horses with her carriage.

“Ashley, Amanda this is my husband. James meet my sister’s Ashley and Amanda.” James walked up and greeted him self to Ashley and Amanda. He kissed his wife and looked at Amanda.

“Lets get ready to go to the hearts content castle you three vixens. Oh, your son and daughter can come to, but I got to say that kids there like to mess around so keep them close.” James was telling the three vixens and then he spotted Ashley’s rose. He smiled and looked at her son Night. He has his father’s looks and muscle build up. He felt his father’s courage in this young boy. He looked back at Ashley who’s looking down at the pebbled walks way. Ashley misses her husband Hamon, every time she wakes up in the morning Hamon always gives her a kiss. But now since he died in battle trying to defend there kingdom from the wolf packs attack. They move fast and nimble like water in the red ocean of lava. Lava queen Nikki, flanked the wolf pack and slain about two hundred. She tried to save Hamons life but it was too late.

“He has much of his father’s looks and talent and skill’s Ashley. It’s a shame that he can’t train with his father. I believe that Amanda’s husband is still alive. I never saw him in battle so I can’t say that Night can train with him.” James looked at Amanda as Ashley started to tear up. Every time some one mention Hamon in front of her she is so emotional about it. Amanda held Ashley in her arms trying to comfort her.

“I’m sorry to bring up Hamon in front of you Ashley. How’s Raphael doing Amanda? Is he still in top preferments? I never heard from him since the lava queen emerged from the dormant volcano. Uria is constantly on my tail behind about Nikki. If only Mark can control Nikki from sending the lava troops to the mutual kingdom steel. The steel queen will decide to join only on her terms.” James said worried as he continued, Nikki appeared behind Ashley. Nikki just looked at James with fury in her eyes. James backed away drawing his sword. One lava knight appeared next to Nikki with full metal armor, a rare metal shield, and a gold steel long sword with encrypted lava knight language. The design on his armor and shield has a legendary dragon called Dark Hamon the silent killer. With one snap of James fingers, his armor appeared as same as the lava knight’s. In many ways his armor is built differently. His shield is made of a rare pure jewel of onyx; his armor is crafted out of the strongest gemstones ever known to the fox kingdoms, helix stone, is a rare fire stone that was the cause of the fire back in Jassiel. Dorbrok is a rare shadow stone that consumes the souls of the ever so brave knight’s. Shisika is the stone of the earth, its value of rarity is far beyond the black crystal stone. Durronki is the stone of the ever lasting winds of the planet. It’s a very rare stone that many died just to get there hands on it.

“Nikki call off your knight this instant, I don’t want any one to get hurt.” The lava knight lashed out at James. James just raised his doom blade to his face and blocked his attack. He then kicked the lava knight off of him and threw down his shield, gripping the doom blade of Raj he retaliated. He swung the blade three inches away from the knights face and elbowed him in the abdomen. Causing the knight to lose his footing he swung yet again cutting the chest plate. The knight lunged forward and James managed to wedge his sword in the gaps of the blade. Ashley stepped in and separated the knight and James.

“Cut it out you two and James get back to Hannah now!” The knight tried to lunge again, but James pushed his sword into his neck. His soul swallowed by the Dorbrok stone. He then stored his doom blade into the sheath casing. Nikki watched in fury and drew her sword of Jade. James met Nikki’s gaze as the queen and king of different kingdoms stare down. Nikki’s gaze was legendary to all even to kings and queens.

“Nikki stand down, I don’t want to hurt you.” Nikki lashed out at James, but he’s faster then Nikki. He swiftly blocked her attack and she kicked his chest plate. Causing him to stumble back, Nikki took it as an advantage. She drove her sword of Jade into his onyx shield; James kicked her off and threw the shield to Ashley. He wielded his doom blade of Raj and clashed with her sword. One knight in Brazilkon gem that has the power to consume light and energized his stamina disarmed the two warrior’s and unleashed a haze of light confusing them.

“That’s enough out of both of you! Save your damn energy for the war agents the tribes not our self’s! Get your asses in gear and get your damn knight’s ready! I don’t want to explain to emperor Uria why the powers are fighting!” Dante said as he concealed the light of Brazilkon. He found that James Dorbrok armor repelled the effects of Brazilkon.

“That’s not possible; my Brazilkon light should have stunned you! Your armor, what is it made of?” James held his sword to the sheath and concealed it. The Dorbrok stone shimmered and let out a shadow of pure darkness. The knight backs up and takes up a defensive position. He raises his sword of pure Brazilkon and ready him self.

“I have the stone of Dorbrok stone in my armor. My armor is crafted out of the rarest jewels on this planet. My kingdom never losses any battle because of the gems. That is if the tribes don’t find the anti-gems. Nikki do you have the gem of Rosika?” Nikki nodded as she’s trying to catch her breathe. She then throws the gem of Rosika at James. James catches the gem in the Shisika jewel cervix. The gems power surges threw his armors plate.

“This lava gem is ultra rare, no one but you and Mark can get there hands on this gem. Its power is limited as I feel it. It seems you can only get this one in a rare valley, mountain, and or volcano. The valleys belong to Jassiel and Hannah.” Nikki walked to James for a moment then collapsed in his arms. James caught her just before she hit the ground. James held Nikki close to him; she opened her eyes and smiled up at him.

“You’re a great fighter James; I knew I trained you well. But a great husband to my sister Hannah, no one can be better then you. Your brother Robert, he’s waiting for your reply for some assassins’ to send to the locust tribe to kill there leader.” Nikki smile was cute with a sweet pink shade across her creamy white cheeks. James had his hand around her waist just like her husband would do. James moved his hands up a bit away from her tail side. Nikki’s eyes were glistening under the black sky of morning. The sun gave off a dark light that can make the foxes more versatile in combat. Only every four years the black sun and the white moon come around. Nikki, Hannah, Ashley, and Amanda love the white moon at night. Nikki gave her baby brother a kiss on the cheek; she then rested her head on his shoulder.

“Are you tired sister? I could take you to the chariot so you can take a nap?” Nikki nodded no so James just held her in his arms. Her cheeks were still a cute shade of pink as she snuggles into his puffy chest. Hannah came up behind James; she gave him a hug and looked at her sister in his arms. Hannah smiled as she strokes her hair.

“Ok, so the hearts content castle has to wait. Looks like the doom tribe sent there soldiers out to attack your castle Ashley and Amanda.” Ashley stood in front of Hannah and James in her Rosika armor. She drew her blade of Uria out of her armored sheath. Amanda was in her Tuskina stone armor, she already drew her blade of Zero. Zero was a legendary dragon that only the snow queen can control. Their son Night was in a mix armor of Tuskina and Rosika combined. His sword was crafted out of a legendary stone Jasinto. Jasinto was a stone that controlled the tide of war, only if you know how to harness the power of it. It’s also the stone of the third legendary dragon called Tie Dou Lou, the dragon of the tide.

“Let them come, we are more then ready! Guards, ready the soldiers and build the defenses around the kingdom!” Ashley barked the commands out to the first noble rank soldier. All the warriors, archers, and tactical soldiers fall out of the kingdoms gates. Dante spawned the Brazilkon knights to fight along side with the Rosika knights, Tuskina knights, and Dorbrok knights. Behind all the knights came a green glow of energy, the king and queen of Jade Han Tan came to their aid. The jade teleporter shimmer a blue glow as the Jade Han Tan knights came out with new energy weapons. The king and queen of this empire stepped out with dragon riders.

“Queen Jade, It’s an honor to have you fight with us. King Arnold, your dragons look healthy as always. I’m guessing that queen Shadow sent you to help? She can sense if my Dorbrok armor sends off one single shadow flair.” The king jumped off the dragon, he landed in front of the queen’s dragon. His armor is a striking resemblance of the dragon. The same with the queen’s armor, but her dragon is a lighter shade of Jade.

“I needed no shadow to find out that my brothers and sisters are in trouble. The queen has sense that Ashley’s power rose well above the level of hers. But what I’m here for is to aid you and nothing else.” The knights prepare for the on coming strike on the kingdom. The doom tribe was marching to a path of destruction. They took over the fire dynasty, but they refuse to take part in the war. Once they saw the doom banners, the archers of Tuskina fired deadly arrows with ice shards on them. The Rosika nobles sprung the trap behind them and attacked. The doom tribe was well a wear of the attack. The doom and Rosika warriors clashed swords as the archer’s rain down arrows of ice.

“Knights get ready for the attack; the trap won’t last for…” He couldn’t finish the sentence when the tribe ran for them. The Rosika archers used the cross bows, they were advancing to close. The pike men’s took up position around the cross bows. Once they loaded the next bolt, the pike men’s would then crouch and the archers would shoot. They would repeat the sequence over and over again.

“Don’t let them crush our position! We shall prevail, we shall survive, and we shall proceed to victory!” The entire knight’s rounded up and pushed the tribe warriors away from the kingdom. The Jade dragons took flight with huge boulders in each claw. Once over head they will drop the boulders on top of them. The tribe warriors tried throwing their spears at the dragon, but only to meet the pikes and gem swords in their necks.