It seems you are still a bit green to the story business as it were, Ryuu. I'm really glad you posted this though because I do sense some potential in you though.

To be honest, this doesn't really have a point to be written. This is just a "guy wakes up, guy gushes over bf, guy realizes he doesn't go have to go to work" sort of thing. And there's nothing wrong with a slice of life story but you've given the reader nothing to remember, Ryuu. I don't even remember the species much except that the bf was avian due to the wings part.

I'm not really sure if you know what you want this to be at the point. A romance prehaps? erotica? It's up in the air. But don't you give up, Ryuu. You seem to have some great ideas for setup (maybe make more of a point about the hybrid stuff like is it normal for this to happen, what does society think of this?

Hope this helps Ryuu and put the next one in the critique part of the forum. I'd love to see more.

Well, this is just a start, i would like to write more but need to get it into 3rd person, and i need to fix a lot of issues with it