I looked back at what I originially did for the first chapter of "A 'Macro' Surprise" and I didn't like a few things. I felt it needed more detail and so I rewrote it so it had some. I also changed a few things here and there like the last names of a couple of the characters. I'm still not 100% satisfied with it, though. I feel I need more detail in some places and maybe some more action and/or dialouge. So expect another rewite someday.

However, I figured I might as well post what I got for now since I can't think of what I should/could add after all. Plus, I want to see what you guys think. Maybe you can tell me how I can improve this further or something. I'm leaving the original chapter 1 up, though. That way you can see how I redid it and hopefully improved it.

Please comment and enjoy.