Very nice. I like, and I don't normally go for rhyming stuff. >^_^<

Thank you. I don't usually like the rhyming stuff I have written because most of it sounds like a forced advertising jingle. Not even a good jingle, like "The snack that smiles back until you bite their heads off . . . " *grin*

I loved that one, too. ("They smile because they haven't got a clue that they'll be eaten.") :) Haven't heard it in a long time, but then I don't really listen to the radio much these days...

Now I liked that very much.....

V.

Glad you liked it. The folks at work think I'm even crazier than before because I was singing through the verses over and over and trying to get the words right. Probably glad it was a lullaby, so I don't worry people :)

*laughs... I have always been known as a very strange individual... one person (the owner of a company and a lady that sent chills down my spine) told me so... where upon I told her 'thank you, I work very hard to encourage that image.'

Hugs...

V.

I think that's lovely.

Thank you. The tune I had in mind was very lovely with a little bit of minor key tension, and I'm glad I did it justice :) (I think I'm going to have to dig out one of my old hymnals to find it, as it's still haunting me)

Oh my GOD.

Not only is this insanely cute in a would-read-it-to-kids sort of way, it features masterful meter and precisely one half-rhyme, the sort of poetic structure I yearn to see in today's metered poems. ;_; You've made an old word-slinger happy, you have.

Wow, I'm glad you liked it so much, and thanks for the fav! I do enjoy the metered stuff, even when it doesn't actually rhyme, because I love how it sounds when I say it (sort of like a well written accent mentioned elsewhere *grin*)

Frankly, I blame Shakespere :)

I've not been a true fan of meter without rhyme (though the opposite I do love), but my main concern is with the leagues of young writers who refuse to tighten their meter, producing sloppy excess syllables and half-rhymes. I'm a bit of a poetry Nazi when it comes to this stuff, and that's why I don't usually critique poetry.

Thank you for your time, then *smile* I suppose if I'm going to do it, I'm going to try to do it right.
I try to stick to a regular meter or avoid it entirely. Strange things do happen, but they are, as you say, sloppy. I am not enough of a genius to write good intentionally sloppy meter 8)

"The north wind stalks these woods my child,
With sharp and icy claws
His teeth will chew your ears and frost
Will bite your tender paws."

That by itself would be really neat...a version of Jack Frost that looks like a bat, wrapping himself around the back of your head to give your ears frostbite...

Thank you. I sort of imagine that as the cautionary response to "But I don't wanna go to sleep. Can I stay up another month, pleeeeeeeeeeese?"
"No, dear, the frost will get you . . . ."

Hum… *taps finger on chin* Maybe there really is something to this poetry thing after all.

Used to avoid it because I didn’t seem to get most of what I had to read of it in school, but with all of you throwing your little snippets here and there its starting to grow on me.

This is yet another example of one I actually like, and that’s saying quite a bit.

If I avoided everything that was a bad experience in school, I wouldn't do very much ;)

Actually, I think it's just much easier to come by something like this in snippets when you are ready for them instead of the "last chance to make them literate before they get a haircut and a real job" classes in high school or the "cram as much culture in your head as possible" poetry unit in many colleges. Schools are trying to teach "Romeo and Juliet" when the kids are only ready for "Paradise by the Dashboard Light."

*chuckles* So true, so true.

That is really amazing. I love the way it flows so nicely and I can hear the voice clearly in my mind of how this will go. (may not be exactly the voice and beat you are thinking of, but it's very soft and motherly gentle.) Very well done, this actually makes me smile in it's sweetness.

Glad it made you smile. The enjoyment is the main part, and the Proscriptive Poem Police (PPP) will not haul you away if your voice and beat do not follow mine exactly. If I've chosen the words well, it will come out in the end :)

Phew, thanks for not calling the Fuzz on me ;)

latelatelateLAATE~!

That was very cute! I'd say you captured that feel of a mother singing her children to sleep. Did you have any specific tune in mind to go with it? I at first tried being generic and attaching it to Braham's lullaby, but that doesn't seem to fit... hmm... I suck at doing that though. XD

I honestly wish I could remember what hymn it was, but at any rate it was an arrangement that I learned in a church choir when I was in high school. I don't even remember all the words, but the tune still runs in my head. I suppose you could say this was a way to sing the song and get it OUT of my head 8)

Ah. You were in the choir too? I was when I was in a catholic elementary school... ...Of course that doesn't mean I can actually sing... anyway, yeah. I can completely understand that one. XD

Cute. Sweet. Liked this, even without music the lyrics can be interpreted as a lullaby. Great piece.