This was written back on August 10 2007.....
no real info otherwise about this piece..... This though was one of the first pieces that i had written since 2000 just so people are aware...
You say love as if it was some borrowed, broken emotion; but that’s not what I remember.
On those long summer nights, those nights where even the sun had retreated from its own heat, and the moon refused to show her face to bask in what remained, we laid there;
Laid there in nothing more then our sighs, and our smiles, curled up with contentment, between each in spite of our skin sticking together. Holding closely to each other as we lay in the grass behind that house.
No breeze to make it cooler, no dew to quench our thirsts, With only the sounds of our hearts rising, ringing, making music in time.
Our Sweat trying to cool our brows as we danced to the music our hearts were singing.
We dreamed of what the next day, week, month and year would bring.
We said that our love could take a house and make it a home…. But now, that home lay broken, battered and blue. Funny, my heart feels that way too.
Words flow out, not in understandable phrases but in rough images, crude memories of those wonderful, warm evening nights.
But even now, the sun rises, light breaks just like fragile memories. Like panes of glass, memories end.
Heat increases and light blinds; no longer are we curled about each other.
All I wanted was that night to last forever… mostly so that when you said “I love you” It meant something more then that broken emotion
I wanted it to always be true.
no real info otherwise about this piece..... This though was one of the first pieces that i had written since 2000 just so people are aware...
You say love as if it was some borrowed, broken emotion; but that’s not what I remember.
On those long summer nights, those nights where even the sun had retreated from its own heat, and the moon refused to show her face to bask in what remained, we laid there;
Laid there in nothing more then our sighs, and our smiles, curled up with contentment, between each in spite of our skin sticking together. Holding closely to each other as we lay in the grass behind that house.
No breeze to make it cooler, no dew to quench our thirsts, With only the sounds of our hearts rising, ringing, making music in time.
Our Sweat trying to cool our brows as we danced to the music our hearts were singing.
We dreamed of what the next day, week, month and year would bring.
We said that our love could take a house and make it a home…. But now, that home lay broken, battered and blue. Funny, my heart feels that way too.
Words flow out, not in understandable phrases but in rough images, crude memories of those wonderful, warm evening nights.
But even now, the sun rises, light breaks just like fragile memories. Like panes of glass, memories end.
Heat increases and light blinds; no longer are we curled about each other.
All I wanted was that night to last forever… mostly so that when you said “I love you” It meant something more then that broken emotion
I wanted it to always be true.
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I waited a while to read this.. hoping I'd be able to be in a place where I could properly comment on prose from you since i know you put a lot into it....
Suffice it to say... I'm... inadequate a person to comment on this. I'm too overwhelmed with my own to give proper critique.
--except, of course, to let you know... you touched.
Suffice it to say... I'm... inadequate a person to comment on this. I'm too overwhelmed with my own to give proper critique.
--except, of course, to let you know... you touched.
Due to last night's server issues I couldn't comment... but what I was gonna post last night in response is this:
I completely understand tribb......
I am thankful to know that even one individual is touched by my writing.... it means a lot to me...
I know the pain you've been through to a smaller degree and I am honoured that you've allowed me to be there when you've needed someone to talk to.... and that still remains, if you need to talk to someone or have a shoulder to cry upon, I'll be there to help you out tribb...
I completely understand tribb......
I am thankful to know that even one individual is touched by my writing.... it means a lot to me...
I know the pain you've been through to a smaller degree and I am honoured that you've allowed me to be there when you've needed someone to talk to.... and that still remains, if you need to talk to someone or have a shoulder to cry upon, I'll be there to help you out tribb...
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