I really liked the action part at the end. It was not too easy for the charachters to win and the acton was fun to read.

The simplicity of your descriptions are in a way stylistic, Where you are more worried about the story as opposed to the "fourishes" behind it.

I found your story easy to read but once again, you will need description for it to be more memorable. THe next one you write, try to describe one place or one charachter more in depth. This helps us to "see" them more clearly. I liked the descriptions of Cam's demeanor and of his wolf shape, that was good. overall things are more clear. One thing that realy bugs me is how little description of the Bloodmoon building there is. I am curious to know more about it and the people in it.

First thanks for the comment. Next I liked the action ending too, my heros arn't invincable, and that makes it more realistic. Also next chapter I'll throw in a discription of the Bloodmoon building.

I also found the tension you portrayed on the rape and murder scene to be remarkably well done, without being too graphic.

Heh, thats just the ability to jerk peoples emotions around. As for how graphic, well things might be a little bloody somtimes, but I'm quite clean when it comes to these storys. Aka: No porn, minor swearing, some gore.

^_^ the plot thickens...

I just finished this, these are really good.

well, first of all thanks very much for reading my work!....secondly, thanks for the watch as well!...i am still working on the last chapters of this...just haven't gotten much time for em, but the will be coming...sooner or later....anyway, i may hop over and read your stories as well when i get the chance!

Thanks! I do have one shortcoming on this: I sometimes get lost becasue i don't know all of the characters. I'm sure I'll have then all straightened out once I read more of it.

yeah, there are a lot of charicters in the series, but you'll get em straight after a while hopefully...i try to keep things from getting confusing.