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i still havent come up with a name...oh well...srry it took so long to get this part out...i was playing the D3 beta XP
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Eodred
~eodred
Your writing is getting better with each chapter. In my opinion, the switch to first person was a good one. It gives a more personal feel and understanding of what he persives as going on. Again I am not a writer, just a reader. Just do what you feel is right for your story.
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thanks...im not a writer...this is sort of a wildhair thing...honestly im surprised its turning out so long...i just wish i could make it flow better and get rid of so much of the "i said, she said" stuff...need to expand my vocabulary i guess XP...but again thanks...im really lookin for some critique so i can make it better
