Wow... now that was a good story. didnt go the way I was expecting it to, but awsome work.

There were a few spelling errors, but what story does'nt?

Thank you for reading and the comment! Yeah, i knew there was spelling errors but the more I looked at it the more stuff I added, so a basic spell check and a once over had to suffice. I did this for  watergazer her transformation story prompt. Also, the icon for this submission is thanks to Google images.

Great story. You did a cool job of makeing the reader feel what she felt. And i'm always up for a good old fasioned happy ending. Fav.

It was a good story. You did very well with the emotions and making the reader feel for Carrie. Nice work. n_n

Of course, given the person that I am, I can't leave it entirely untouched. I noticed a few grammatical errors. They were mostly minor ones; you might want to proofread it a couple times. But the two main ones I saw were the use of numbers (Say 'ten' instead of '10', et cetera) and your use of possessives. You say 'Carries' a lot in that. If you signify that someone owns something, you put an apostrophe before the 's'. So, instead of Dans notebook, it's Dan's notebook. Y'see?

And lastly, I think you can do a lot more with the coyotes. You sort of just mention them once and then go along with them. Try to make them a big part of the story. Don't make it blatantly obvious, but mention the coyotes here and there. Mention them somewhere in the beginning. Abstractly, yanno? Then keep mentioning them in spots throughout the story. It'll /really/ amplify Carrie's sense of joy and help tie the whole story together.

I very much agree with your criticisim. Tt would make alot of sense to tie the coyotes in there much more strongly. I am glad you liked it!

There is alot of things that were just plain overlooked/omitted because of time resrictions (el college) and page limit restrictions.

I am typing while I read...so far I do see the spelling errors but I attribute that to the flow of writing without editing to stop the creative flow. Doesn't bother me too much. I'm amazed you choose this type of subject already...really impressed actually, since most would just go for the transformation of the creature but this will have a duel transformation in it...or so I am thinking as I read here. Love the line He had a mesmerizing salt and pepper goatee and sophisticated skinny glasses. Sweet description. Not that I didn't like Carrie's, but that was an interesting way of putting it simply. The agent orange we sorta have to put more work into visualizing...though not really after seeing your links. I learned a lot in a short time there.Another excellent line here: Nothing was more terrifying to her than that word. When that ‘nam’ left peoples lips it hit her right in the chest"...perfect. I'd eliminate this line "embarrassed that it needed vacuuming.: because it makes it sound like she isn't rivited to the explaination the doc. is giving her even though she clearly is. I'd insert that line while she is inviting the doc inside her trailer instead. One thing...I would make a mention somewhere in the beginning about the coyote...how she longed to be part of them...sorta mentioned in passiong besides just saying she heard the wonderful sound of the coyotes. Another awesomeline "with an orgasm of information that she would soon understand." Excellent choice to have only Carrie's perspective throughoutand not go ominperspective. I really liked this story. I think it's one of the best I've ever read...could easily be made even into a movie or something. Kick ass work!

Thank you so much for the comment! I felt so good after I read it I just didn't know what to say! You have a very good point with the vacuuming line, it could be best put when Dr. Watterson and Jody come in to Carrie's trailer. Personally, it's a nervous habit when I am excited. I can't sit down. I find things to clean or play with and generally fidget alot. And nothing irritates me more than a floor that needs to be vacuumed.

It is truly an honor to get a compliment like the one you gave... Made me feel like my effort was worth it :D

It really is some of the best writing I've come across. The idea alone is so different and unique it sets your work apart. I hope you do something with your talent and write a book of short sories or a novel sometime.

Fascinating concept that actually gives a good reason for transformation, which is so rare now a days in furry fiction. And wow, I didn't know about the horrific atrocities that were causes by agent orange. This was a real eye opener.