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OK...Half Elves, Half Fairies and Half Goblins all go to the same place to deal with their quirky addictions, Mythological Anonymous! Contains Furry Femdom Spanking, Butt Fetish, Wasabi and Heart Warming Moments
Category Story / Fetish Other
Species Human
Size 50 x 50px
File Size 23 kB
Some constructive criticism:
-when finished writing let it sit for a few days and then read aloud to find grammar and fluency mistakes
-Be consistent with formatting, i noticed that some name weren't capitalized when you going to have that person talk.
-I didn't see where the love relationship started going from the Mythological Anonymous meeting to the restaurant
Opinions:
-some strange addictions, but I guess not all that unreal
-generally not my cup of tea, but it still has good quality
-As much as I like speech, it could use more third person actions and a bit more descriptiveness.
Overall it is a good story.
-when finished writing let it sit for a few days and then read aloud to find grammar and fluency mistakes
-Be consistent with formatting, i noticed that some name weren't capitalized when you going to have that person talk.
-I didn't see where the love relationship started going from the Mythological Anonymous meeting to the restaurant
Opinions:
-some strange addictions, but I guess not all that unreal
-generally not my cup of tea, but it still has good quality
-As much as I like speech, it could use more third person actions and a bit more descriptiveness.
Overall it is a good story.
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