oh boy hope she doesnt kill her lol !! ',..,'

Well, that would end up depending on which one of them ended up being the main character, or if both are, well, who knows? :)

lol true !! '..,'

The scene is written from Amanda's POV, but the story could go a few ways. :)

This is very interesting, I liked what I read.

Thank you for reading! Do you do a lot of reading? :)

I do, I enjoy reading ^^

I'm glad you like my work. :)

I do enjoy the descriptions that you provide which left me wondering why the area itself wasn't described.

Do you mean the arena itself?

I'm assuming that there is something other than the box with 14, the handler, and lights in the staging area. You had mentioned that the cage was only in one dark corner of the room. I'm assuming that since this cage was only in the corner in the dark that there would be more in the room. I know that arena itself won't be interesting.

There probably is, though as far as what was strictly necessary for the scene, I think I covered what you needed to know, though that is something I struggle with, not being certain if I've added enough detail. A lot of resources advise against info dumps or information that serves no purpose, but it is complex trying to decide under which category it falls. Of course, if I'd intended to make the story longer it would've had more detail by default. I do appreciate your comment. :)

That is more of a writer's style choice anyway. It just seemed like a good idea because the other descriptions were quite nice.

I suppose it is. :) Though I am always finding it tricky to know how much detail to include, more afraid of the not enough than too much.

It reminded me quite a bit of Tron: Legacy when Sam was simply thrust into the game to sink or swim. Amanda is unusually confident, or at least she wants to show that she is. I'm interested to see how she handles fourteen.

Were this to be extended, it would be interesting to contemplate the number of ways it could be taken. Of course, at the moment I have any number of projects, but it may be something to hold on to until later.

For a little scenelet, I think it worked nicely.

Even though it is only a bit more than one page, the twists in this story are pretty startling, to me. The only thing I'm not happy with is that the story doesn't go on longer. It's really great, Lauren.

Oh, and your picture for the Thursday prompt is derp face. :P

Time constraints really keep me from doing longer pieces for the thursday prompts, but rest assurred I am hard at work during most of my writing hours trying to put longer things together. I am always on the lookout for test readers, though most folks either are too busy or lack the expertise I need to help me. Regardless, I am always appreciative when folks like my work.

Nicely handled. This one really makes me want to read more. You should really continue this.

I might have to sometime. I do think I finally figured out the story that was kicking my tail for six months. :)

If this is part of it, I'd say you did.

No, this is a new idea. Though I may expand it into a short story if I have the right publication come along or something. ;)

Expand it now and have it on paw for when you need a good story to submit.

Maybe. :) I shall have to file it under ideas to work on. :)

Do! then tomorrow haul it out and work on it.

and why did you not continue this one?

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This is one time I can actually say I did. I went and reworked this into a full length short story. Though it is somewhat different in concept, it is heavily based on this idea. ;)

Steven King took many of his story ideas from a collection of short stories called 'Night Shift' that he published back in the 60's...

V.

My muse is unpredictable. Some times I'll spend days searching for an idea, and nothing comes. Then I'll just be sitting around and I get OMG idea!

and that's how it goes too....

V.

It does, feast or famine, it's never steady. :P