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Well this is a very short story that I had to write for a Holocaust project for a class at my school. My group was assigned the death camp of Treblinka, which had killed about 850,000 Jews before it was destroyed by the Nazis. This is a short tale about a new arrival at the camp who was selected for death.
Dedicated to those who died at the death camp of Treblinka
Hope you enjoy it as much as you can for a somber subject and I hope I got the idea down well too
Comments are welcome
Dedicated to those who died at the death camp of Treblinka
Hope you enjoy it as much as you can for a somber subject and I hope I got the idea down well too
Comments are welcome
Category Story / Human
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File Size 41.4 kB
That... is a *good* job. One I wouldn't have dared, to be honest.
Say I know too much about the Holocaust. To write about it would mean spending
a week afterwards shivering. Reading this'll do for a while.
Small critique point: Story hinges on the main character having special sight, sees the world in
a very different way. Which is an extremely effective idea, BTW, for multiple reasons.
So the first sentence tells us this, then moves on to place us in the railcar. Result: the special
sight idea gets covered up a bit. The railcar trumps special sight in the reader's mind.
One easy solution: break the first sentence into two. And/or, open with a two-sentence
para about the special sight. Then second para, the railcar.
All told, you got this one very right. Too few remember.
FB.
Say I know too much about the Holocaust. To write about it would mean spending
a week afterwards shivering. Reading this'll do for a while.
Small critique point: Story hinges on the main character having special sight, sees the world in
a very different way. Which is an extremely effective idea, BTW, for multiple reasons.
So the first sentence tells us this, then moves on to place us in the railcar. Result: the special
sight idea gets covered up a bit. The railcar trumps special sight in the reader's mind.
One easy solution: break the first sentence into two. And/or, open with a two-sentence
para about the special sight. Then second para, the railcar.
All told, you got this one very right. Too few remember.
FB.
Yeah I can see what you mean by writing about this kind of subject about how it can be demoralizing and fearful at some spots. I actually really enjoyed writing this story and I love learning about this subject. Holocaust is definitely one of the hardest subjects to learn emotionally but definitely has some of the most interesting information for any kind of history.
Those edits you pointed out were taken into account and I will try to look out for them in the future, and I am glad you enjoyed it otherwise ^^
Those edits you pointed out were taken into account and I will try to look out for them in the future, and I am glad you enjoyed it otherwise ^^
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