The sketch 'implies' more detail, if that makes any sense. It gives an impression of shade and depth, whereas the liens just look... Empty, too stark. If that makes any sense at all. If it doesn't, it's 'cuz I'm drunk, so there.

I prefer the sketch, but my drawings are always skechy~
The lines (esp. the top/shoulder straps) are of various thickness, so the style looks too 'I haven't figured it out yet' in terms of the confidence I feel of the artist. I may be totally wrong, but that's what I see~ I feel more style/confidence in the sketch.

See, I kinda agree and kinda disagree. Varied line weights are a good thing, I think. Weaker artists tend to stick with one thickness through the whole thing, good ones vary the weights to add emphasis. I think the sketch is superior for other reasons.

What are the superior reasons, boss?
More character? More natural flow?

Could you recommend a way to fix said inferiority?
Please?

welp, just look at 'em side by side. The sketch has shading, under the breasts and along the calves, for instance. That adds depth and makes it seem more real. You drew eyelids on the sketch, which amke her expression seem more nuanced and complete, giving her an ironic, snarky tone as opposed to what appears to be one-dimensional naivete on the inks. The shading and additional detail on the shorts/bra do simply that, add more detail.

Look at a person in real life, they do not have a definiute outline The softness of skin and hair make them blur, ever so slightly, into their surroundings. The pencil sketch seems to me to capture that feeling of softness where the ink looks like a cartoon. Strictly segregated from the world. Especially with a big squishy cuddly carachter, softness is important.

Once again, I';ve had like 10 ounces of gin so far, so if this makes no sense... Blame Bombay Sapphire. >_>

I'll fix the etes and shading thing, don't you worry boss.

If I'm boss, can i call you foreman?! :D

Sure Wynaut

Also don't sweat it, I'm dead tired right now :V

An improvement to be sure, but I sillt like the original pencils betterm and am no longer ca[able of defending my opinion becauase of booze. So g'night, and lemmee just say I always love your work., ^_^

Looking better, I like how you lowered her head and thickened it along with her heck.

Well, I like both the sketched and inked versions for multiple reasons. =3

The sketched version feels like it has more character to it, like you actually put alot of thought and effort into it. The inked version however, feels cleaner and more comprehensible (i.e. you get a clearer idea of what's what and what goes where). So I guess it just really depends on what you think would be better; either a drawing with character or a drawing that can be easily read and understood.

I hope that helps.

Oh, and I forgot to mention that it's a nice pic either way. It's always good to see more Fiona around. X3

Or more OF Fiona around. :V

That too.

Indeed :V
Also how do I add character?
INPUT

Well, maybe thinner lines and more shading would work? Perhaps even making the overall piece a bit more messy? I'm actually not all that sure. ^_^;

With the inked piece, it looks very clean; which to some, might be considered sterile. So my guess would be to not make it as clean when you ink it.

Leave a smudge or two and see what happens. You might just be surprised. =3

Really diggin this piece c:

What you dig about it?
Anything you DON'T dig?

can't see the butt.. otherwise happy c:

Hmm, what is it like cuddling something that jiggles? Anyway, I think you should clean up the lines a bit more and you should be golden.

This is pretty nice. the text is kind of hard to read, though, since it's so small. Also, where the lines of her shorts end seems a bit sharp; try inking by using only outward curves, our anatomy teacher recommended that and it's helped me tremendously. Even things that curve inward are made up of two shallow outward curves in a sort of "V' shape