its seems you really have got the character development down so far i like how you made cerbarus and its awsome as you have it currently.

thank you you are the only comment i have gotten. That's why part 4and5 are not up...no one really reads them but i will post them anyway. So besides cerberus what else do you like thus far?

i like how you started to describe the world AJ is in and how it looks the same as the human world but some slight differences iam curious about the yellow eyes thing though from part two still but how is part one supposed to be read

Part one is a big oops on ny part its how AJ came into the author world. It was my very dirstvwtiting and I'm thinking of rewriting it and changing something just in part one though

let me know when you repost it ill give it a look see

For sure

Ok.. first things first. Maybe it is just a matter of personal preference or so, but I am loath to type the numbers one to ten in my stories. Usually I type the whole words as numbers tend to interrupt the "flow" of a story - at least in my opinion.

What I do like, however is the Cerberus. Nicely outlined character with behavior so very different from the mythological Cerberus. Well done.

You might, however, need to try and find a less abrupt end for your chapters... This one here leaves me with some sort of "Huh? What the..?"-feeling. I know this is no easy thing as I frequently have issues ending my chapters properly myself