You're going to wish you'd never asked me to look at your old stuff, cause now I'm going to be all over it like a fly on honey :O

As for this particular one, aye, free verse. Can't say I'm a fan of free verse at all.

BUT! This does make an excellent song, even if the topic is very sad. I'm picturing something with a lot of piano in it. My real comment on it is that it should end with the chorus, cause that always makes songs sound more complete to me.

Hehe, I don't mind you being all over me. :3 it's more of a compliment really. I understand that not a lot of people are major fans of freeverse, but it is the one style that gives me the most freedom to express my feelings and put more life into it. I really try to stray from rhyme, since you always have to find words to match and then things get all messy and my poems just fall apart. O.o I have no clue why all the ? marks got into it in place of the ' d placed in front of the slang/shortened version of words. I only put that ending on(instead of the chorus) because it sort of emphasizes the sadness in the lyric. It is about how I have been in the dating scene over the past three years and I'm glad you like it for what it would be. ^_^ I was actually thinking piano myself. Thanks for the comments, I hope to hear more from my foxy critiquer :3

Hugs, I hope never to do this to you.

I think free verse can be fun, as long as you bring some structure or sense to it, y'know?

There needs to be a place for some way of finding a voice that doesn't have to stay to a particular poetic form but can be freer to say things in a stylistic way that you wouldn't do with just prose.

Anyway, it's good to give things like this voice!

Thank you so much for the encourageing words hon <3 It has been far too long since I have actually sat down to write, with college and work keeping me bogged down >> Thank you so much. Please, note me if you would like to talk more about this and poetry in general. I could really use the motivation!

Sure, as long as turnabout is fair play!
*smiles*

*giggles and hugs* Sure thing, it is totally fair play ;P *pokes*

Well, I've been trying to figure out if I want to learn more about poetic forms in pursuing my own stuff.
So far, I've just been waiting until I had the itch and letting it express itself, trying to keep what wanted to come out as free as it could be to have its own form.

I haven't been really brave enough to see if I was coming close to some particular kind of structure, and part of that seems to be not bothering to learn much about them in general!

Hmmm.....well I could read some of your work if ya like, mainly your most recent work, and get a feel for what you are going for. I really don't look into the type of poem, so much as I look at the meaning and content, as well as how you express it.

That'd be nice! They should all be in the gallery.