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I'm really not sure whether this is finished, possibly because I've been staring at it for about 10 hours now. Would love some feedback and critique while I finish writing up the chapter to go with it. Don't be afraid to be cruel; the biggest improvements are often precipitated by someone pointing out a flaw in something the artist thinks they do quite well tyvm :)
(In other news: OMGZWTFN00B kiss her, she could be yours!!
But he won't. Followers of my story will have to endure many many chapters of these two working out whether their feelings for each other are worth following in a society that frowns on interracial relationships.)
** this version now scrapped, thanks for all the critique! **
(In other news: OMGZWTFN00B kiss her, she could be yours!!
But he won't. Followers of my story will have to endure many many chapters of these two working out whether their feelings for each other are worth following in a society that frowns on interracial relationships.)
** this version now scrapped, thanks for all the critique! **
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Fine then....-kisses the wolf instead-
Though I would say the characters stances/poses seem a bit strained or frozen. Like they are straining against something or what have you.
Also, if there IS a girl in the picture somewhere, you need to make that apparant in facial features.. ie: a lot of women have more delicate features, or maybe you can give her bigger boobs.
Something that makes everyone point at her and say "GIRL!"
No you dont have to give her size H boobs, but maybe define it out a little better.
Another thing, women may have muscles, but you shouldnt define them as much as you do on a man.
Also, I noticed the characters bodies are both "box" looking.
They are both square-ish shaped. There of course is conforming to the bed spread and the bed itself, but they do look a little outlined.
I'm not sure I can adjust her chest at this late phase, but I might have a go... She's not meant to be particularly top heavy, but I could be forgiven some artistic license for the sake of a good picture ¬_¬ Also take the point about muscle definition, though that's mostly the same situation in that she's the strong and fearless warrior race of my fantasy world. If this were star trek, she'd probably be a klingon xD
I was just noticing that both the characters look kinda boyish in a way, and its hard to tell who is the girl if you dont know the backstory n whatnot.
But anyway, it is a good drawing its not like my son drew it
So happy drawing!
Anyhow, I think it's coming along nicely, I sadly can't come up with any decent critique thou.
Details. the details are well done. not too much but enough. Just enough.
the emotion is SO WELL DONE. ESPECIALLY in the facial expression.
I know you want critique, so I'll see if I can find something I don't like about it, but really, it's just a fantasticly beautiful piece.
I like both characters quite a bit, details on furs, eyes, and lighting seems about perfect.
Your foreground is really good, with great details on the fabric. The 'bed' they are on looks like it's right up against the stone wall in the background, so if that's what's intended it's done well, otherwise the perspective there is a -little- off, but nothing game breaking. I love the night sky outside the window though!
Her foot closest to the viewer looks a little undefined, can't really make out any toes or anything, but that's probably the only other thing I can honestly critique on this pic. Awesome work!
the felines jaw is too sharp and the lighting angle is off above/behind the head.
It looks freaking amazing. I love the shading you did.
Well, not nevar, but not for ages yet :)