CW: F/f, Vore, Fatal
Oh come on, not during your cool monologue...
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Oh come on, not during your cool monologue...
Like always, the full comic is available early on my Patreon!
The support means the world to me, and goes a long way in helping me keep doing this in the future <3
https://www.patreon.com/Muhny
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Size 1400 x 2363px
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Not if that coolness is eliminated in a matter of seconds. We didn't even have much time to get to know her as a character. She had such a cool and intimidating introduction that made us want to see what she is up to. It feels a bit like betrayal to the readers, a risky one that could actually lose some of them. It reduces the actual threat into yet another device for vorephilia. This is definitely not how you write a good villian or character at all. Perhaps though, this isn't Muhny's intention at all. I wonder though, why do you create such an interesting and intimidating design, make a lasting first expression of a character just to throw them into a stomach, let them dissolve and turn into waste? Just let them at least succeed at one evil act. Rise the stakes. It's a little disappointing.
Interesting choice of words, she said client which implies she’s doing it for cash. Though she probably doesn’t mind, given the royal family seems pretty well despised by their subjects. Given that we’ve only seen mice among the peasant/serf classes and we’ve only ever seen cats as either soldiers (seemingly professional given how well armored they were) and royalty, it seems to me the cats are in a sort of “Sparta situation” where they’re a minority group of foreign conquerors ruling over a much larger cultural group who they treat as lesser through force of arms. But if that’s the case, who would have the social capital and motive to hire an assassin? We haven’t exactly seen any mice with overflowing wealth, and Nino’s abuses of them seem more the norm than an exception. If anything, it’s possible she’s actually “friendlier” than the average cat given her apparent fascination with mice. In fact, that she’s gotten so close to a mouse servant may be a motive for reactionary cat nobility to try and remove her from the list of potential rulers.
This sudden turn in the last panel is a little disappointing. You create a possible strong antagonist, give them a unique design. You show that they're savvy at their job as they succeed on tying the princess up and immobilize her. The reader is thrilled what might happen next and what her actual motives possibly are, but then you kill the atmosphere by turning them into a snack for the worst character in this comic, destroying the imposing threat in an instant and therefore all tension. This could've been an actual thrilling arch in the plot. All the cool introduction, the lasting impression, gone and turned into literal waste.
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