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In the following chapter, you're about to see one of the biggest writing mistakes I've ever made.
I think now is the best time to explain who the members of my pack are.
You already know about me, so I will talk about Multi first. The main reason we are friends is because he has really good jokes, but also because we agree on so many things. He also always has my back, and I always have his.
Uni was born around the time I reached adulthood (four years after birth). Two years later, he seemed kinda lonely. So I comforted him. And that’s how we met. We quickly became good friends.
While I have some friends, I also have enemies. Enemies such as World. I hate this guy’s guts. In fact, he’s the one who made that joke about me earlier. He constantly refers to Uni, Multi, and I as nerds. I will admit the things we talk about together can get pretty nerdy, but still.
Then there’s the twins Nebula and Nexus. I can never tell them apart and get them confused all the time. I know one of them has a more feminine voice and the other a masculine one, but that doesn’t help much.
Light is mainly a very bright and cheerful individual. Though she probably thinks me and my friends are crazy. I don’t know. That’s the impression her glares give us.
Radiance is the younger brother of Light. Apparently, unlike his older sister, The three of us are his heroes.
And then you know Berry and Bush, the new members of the pack.
I didn’t really have much time to talk about the other members earlier, but now you know them. And now we have 13 members.
Yep. I slapped exposition right in the middle of the story, as well as introducing a bunch of characters which, spoiler but not spoiler, are almost never mentioned or used again. DON'T do this; don't introduce an overwhelming number of characters, and don't introduce characters you're never going to use again.
I think now is the best time to explain who the members of my pack are.
You already know about me, so I will talk about Multi first. The main reason we are friends is because he has really good jokes, but also because we agree on so many things. He also always has my back, and I always have his.
Uni was born around the time I reached adulthood (four years after birth). Two years later, he seemed kinda lonely. So I comforted him. And that’s how we met. We quickly became good friends.
While I have some friends, I also have enemies. Enemies such as World. I hate this guy’s guts. In fact, he’s the one who made that joke about me earlier. He constantly refers to Uni, Multi, and I as nerds. I will admit the things we talk about together can get pretty nerdy, but still.
Then there’s the twins Nebula and Nexus. I can never tell them apart and get them confused all the time. I know one of them has a more feminine voice and the other a masculine one, but that doesn’t help much.
Light is mainly a very bright and cheerful individual. Though she probably thinks me and my friends are crazy. I don’t know. That’s the impression her glares give us.
Radiance is the younger brother of Light. Apparently, unlike his older sister, The three of us are his heroes.
And then you know Berry and Bush, the new members of the pack.
I didn’t really have much time to talk about the other members earlier, but now you know them. And now we have 13 members.
Yep. I slapped exposition right in the middle of the story, as well as introducing a bunch of characters which, spoiler but not spoiler, are almost never mentioned or used again. DON'T do this; don't introduce an overwhelming number of characters, and don't introduce characters you're never going to use again.
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