No, actually, this looks really good! You can run with this. Just, perhaps, if you made the 3 dots on the upper and lower side smaller and closer to the tips of the pupils, that would be cool. The markings should always be more on the thin side. Envision that there are two pupils rather than one, kinda like what's in the middle of my temp ref(it might help with the structure of the eye design better): http://www.furaffinity.net/view/6175068

Sorry it's such a pain! I really like this progress shot though, I think it will be great! Thanks again