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Chapter 01: New Game
[3.600 words] [various transformations] [mind-change]
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Revantar123
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Chapter 02: https://www.furaffinity.net/view/62771851/
This will be a long series about a game-world that traps players inside it, threatening to transform them into monsters or items if they fail. The poor victims are then forced to hunt down the remaining players against their will.
To make everyone human again and rescue all players, they must complete the final quest. However, the AI who created the world doesn’t seem to be good at balancing its difficulty, and has no intention of ever making things easier.
Would you like your very own idea to be brought to life?
Check my commissions page in the link below
https://www.deviantart.com/phyrexia.....OPEN-889915891
[3.600 words] [various transformations] [mind-change]
Commission for
Revantar123Thanks for supporting me!
Chapter 02: https://www.furaffinity.net/view/62771851/
This will be a long series about a game-world that traps players inside it, threatening to transform them into monsters or items if they fail. The poor victims are then forced to hunt down the remaining players against their will.
To make everyone human again and rescue all players, they must complete the final quest. However, the AI who created the world doesn’t seem to be good at balancing its difficulty, and has no intention of ever making things easier.
Would you like your very own idea to be brought to life?
Check my commissions page in the link below
https://www.deviantart.com/phyrexia.....OPEN-889915891
Category Story / Transformation
Species Unspecified / Any
Size 120 x 120px
File Size 21.3 kB
Listed in Folders
I really enjoyed your story, especially the scene where Selis is pulled out of the game by that phantom touch and the whole loading sequence that leads her into the marble hall. That transition felt very immersive and smooth. Another scene that stood out to me was the System introduction and the way different worlds were shown on the screens. The fact that every character sees System differently was a very interesting concept and definitely something that can catch the attention of FA readers.I also felt there were a few things missing. If the emotional reactions of the characters and the psychological weight of the situation were explored a bit more and if some parts were slightly better paced the story could have been even stronger and more eye catching for the FA audience. I would really like to talk to you about this story because I have some amazing ideas related to its world and characters that I would love to share with you, if you are comfortable with that.
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