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OYrn War Stories - REVISED
Vrghr received some very good advice to improve the original version of this segment. During the corrective process, the characters decided that Nia and Hiro hadn't gotten enough dialog in the original version, so they and Ruff, the Wolf, decided to tackle this wuffy and make Vrghr write more of them into this story segment.
The result is over twice the size of the original, with all sorts of new conversation, some inuendo, more humor, new war stories, and more character interaction.
Since this is basically a whole new piece and not just an edit, Vrghr's reposting it with a slightly updated title.
Have a look and see if you like this one better. Wuff's betting you will!
Enjoy! And please feel free to offer any feedback or remarks you wish!
"Writers Write, But Readers Make The Writing Worthwhile!"
The result is over twice the size of the original, with all sorts of new conversation, some inuendo, more humor, new war stories, and more character interaction.
Since this is basically a whole new piece and not just an edit, Vrghr's reposting it with a slightly updated title.
Have a look and see if you like this one better. Wuff's betting you will!
Enjoy! And please feel free to offer any feedback or remarks you wish!
"Writers Write, But Readers Make The Writing Worthwhile!"
Category Story / Fantasy
Species Otter
Size 80 x 120px
File Size 90 kB
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