an interesting story... I enjoyed it...

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I'm glad you enjoyed it, I enjoyed writing it very much.

and that is exactly why we do this... as writers we get to go places no one has ever been before...

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very Good story well done :)

well thanks... any critisism? or anything you particularly liked? i'm trying to get back into the writing scene and feedback helps a lot ^^

There is a lot of spelling and grammar errors, But I do that a lot too... I liked that he went crazy or thought he went crazy and got stuck there. ^.^ like when stuff like that happens. Very tame too which is a good change of pace but I tend to like stuff that is fast paced and gore-y. But for a short story I thought it was very well done and a good start to do a continuation :)

yeah... my computer is a POS and dosn't support WORD... so i have to use Notepad++, which dosn't support spellcheck. and i have Dyslexia so... yeah...

the prompt was "THE ROOM" and i originally had the classic bare-light-bulb torture/interrogation scene or something a bit SAW 1-like... but i figured it was time for a change. (most of my stories are violent and gore-y) so instead i decided to make it a VR room. i figured that his obsession for this woman and extensive time in a VR sim, would eventually cause him to loose his grip on reality. a situation i've been wanting to write for a while. so i decided to take that route. his mind, which was so accustomed to the virtual surroundings, made them real in his subconscious mind. and when he tried to talk to the computer, his mind cause his surroundings to react how they would in a normal world. rather than in the VR setting he was used to. so he seams crazy in the VR world his mind had created, making him ALSO crazy in the real world. he PHYSICALLY didn't get stuck in the VR world, but mentally he never left. i'm also VERY bad at writing stuff like yiff and such, so you probably won't see one of those in my gallery. so, apart from blood, gore, violence, and cursing, all my stories are technically tame.

if you look closely/know my mate and i... there's 2 nods to the two of us in the story. each only about 1 sentence. see if you can find it!

See stuck like that the mind getting use to the vr settings and having the world react is fun stuff to mess with because it can take you on a mind trip because of how the brain works. I love psychology because it allows you to "mess" with minds.
Yiff stuff I dont read just dont really see the point, I have read some , maybe its that I havent found a writter that writes that that I like enough its all very.. slow and blah...
I dont really know you though you and I just chat here and there about stuff.so I probably wont find it, and Ive never even spoken with your mate....

i like the concept of going insane that way, getting mentally stuck in the VR, because, it could possibly HAPPEN if such VR's existed. and i like that semi-realism.
i don't really read yiff, because i'd rather just get it myself, but it can be fun if written right. though i don't know of many writers to look at for that sort of thing. writers in general get under-appreciated here on FA.
as for the nods to my mate and I... you really only need to know our 'sonas to get the nods... i'm an Arctic Fox (i'm 6'4" so i'm quite tall) and he's an Otter (he's also shorter than me)

yeah this site seems to be mostly for.. umm.. art.. lol
Ill look for those later :)

heh yeah... okay, lemme know if you find 'em

You know, I recently wrote a story based on the phrase The Room, it was my first attempt at horror.

As for this piece, it's not bad for a short piece like this. :) I kind of liked the idea of the simulation. :)

i'd describe this as creepy rather than horror. but that's the idea that hit me when i read the prompt. also one of the possible dangers of actual VR. it becomes harder and harder to leave. and you end up wanting to make it your own reality so much you start to believe it is. and the human mind is a powerful thing. you believe something hard enough and it actually happens. (in the case of disease and such) or you mind makes you think it happens (delusions)

Especially if it is preferable to one's reality. It makes me think of Caprica and Apotheosis, I don't know if you ever saw that show.

no i havn't... i don't watch much TV and the only stuff i CAN watch i have to watch online...

They had the idea of a virtual heaven. You die, your avatar 'resurrects' and lives on.

yeah... 'cause that'll end well...

It did not, but that was kind of the point. Hehe.

i figured as much... as much as i hate to reference it. the Matrix has a point... humanity will never accept a true Utopia. we need strife in order to survive. and will create it where there is none.

Well, it wasn't so much accepting Utopia as that the main characters saw no reason to force ascension to virtual heaven when it would kill innocent people to do so. The other side wanted to blow up a stadium to make their point, the chosen would upload but not the innocents.

i guess i'd have to watch it to understand proper

Maybe. *hugs*

i've got so much anime/TV catching up to do still though... i dunno where i'll find time...

not that i'm necessarily complaining, but why the random hugs?

I wonder if I watch too much tv. Normally I'd say no, but I've been having a lot of trouble writing lately.

I just like to be friendly. ;)

i play too many games... this i KNOW because i've gotten too GOOD at them... i beat "hard" games in no time and most games don't pose a challenge for me anymore...

I game for four-five hours a week, that's all. I used to do it a lot more, but I am trying to be good.

i game that much in 4-5 days easily... though i've had to cut back a lot since i'm now going to the library for internet from (typically) 10AM to 6PM