another good installment.. but i think you maaaay have gone a liiiiittle over board in description this time around... from all the different woods and exact measurements... it just felt like a little to much.. to me its good it really is... but that whole description is 1/3 of the entire chapter. i mean to me its important to have detail and create images for the reader but i also tho thought the story felt sortta like burred by the description.... but that might just be me.

its still really great man. i like Zach he seems like my kinda bat, with all his awkward smiles, and Nian seems kinda funny and a little out there. but really smart and wise. kinda like a yoda feel to him maybe? xD and Cheese? hehe cute he eats curses...and it tasted like pepper jack haha xD

I LIKED IT!! I did get kinda lost in the description part, but I was half-ass distracted by Family Guy...>.>;

Nian is my favorite bat, and I want to meet him and learn things from him. xD