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Sixteen, after a failed mission, is focusing on other tasks to not think about it. Nonetheless, she engages in a conversation with another crew member.
Category Story / All
Species Snake / Serpent
Size 120 x 120px
File Size 95.8 kB
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My only suggestion and feedback is on dialogue flow. I personally struggle sometimes making the characters talk without it feeling clunky XD There were a few (like 3 at most) where the dialogue seemed to kind of muddle through itself. The best way i've found to help with this is to try and type as you'd speak. People don't use grammar correctly and will shorten phrases or use words that allow the conversation to flow smoother even though its incorrect form.
As always, keep up the amazing work! I can't wait to see what you make for next week! Will you continue to visit this world or start anew?
As always, keep up the amazing work! I can't wait to see what you make for next week! Will you continue to visit this world or start anew?
Yeah, I can get what you mean. Sometimes it can be unrealistic in some circumstances, but my explanation (at least for some cases) is that it's something that can only appear in the written text, if you know what I mean. Like having a conversation that fits for the story, but doesn't fit real life. And the opposite can also be true, even if that's much rarer.
Also, I like to do some incorrect grammar in some places to have the conversation appear more natural. Since not everyone can speak English perfectly, even if it's someone's native language.
Well... I can do something next week (depending on the topic, I may or may not do anything at all), but I tend to write about different worlds each week for TP. We'll see.
Also, I like to do some incorrect grammar in some places to have the conversation appear more natural. Since not everyone can speak English perfectly, even if it's someone's native language.
Well... I can do something next week (depending on the topic, I may or may not do anything at all), but I tend to write about different worlds each week for TP. We'll see.
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