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Hello. Thank you for reading the prologue to my first submission re-edited again. This should be the last time, but I would not mid some critique nor comments on this since I am an amatuer at this. I hope you enjoy the story. Have a nice day
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Two questions to begin: have you ever read E. E. Knight's series? This is what that reminds me of. Second, what kind of comments are you looking for?
Grammar wise: the story is ok, but watch your comma's tense shifts and fused sentences. While there weren't too many errors of this nature, it could be distracting; that being said, it downst haver to be perfect. Stylisticly, nearly anything can work... Hehe.
Now, story wise... It was decent; it has the potential to go somewhere! But it also has the potential to be something generic; it's all up to you. But I like the sense of fear and drama it gives to the readers. It helos the reader instantly become "involved" in the story, so well done!
Grammar wise: the story is ok, but watch your comma's tense shifts and fused sentences. While there weren't too many errors of this nature, it could be distracting; that being said, it downst haver to be perfect. Stylisticly, nearly anything can work... Hehe.
Now, story wise... It was decent; it has the potential to go somewhere! But it also has the potential to be something generic; it's all up to you. But I like the sense of fear and drama it gives to the readers. It helos the reader instantly become "involved" in the story, so well done!
I did not think of it being like E.E. Knights book. I have read the first one and I kinda liked it. I was thinking that I may use his biology for dragons, but then again I may not. It depends. I will create a journal on it later so that readers can know what to expect biologically. Also, thanks for the critique.
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