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This poem started as a joke poem awhile ago: It went like this:
Otter, otter, in the water, swim swim swim.
Zooming, grooming, fish-consuming. Swim swim swim.
How many fish are in your dish? Swim swim swim.
Otter, otter, in the water, swim swim swim.
But recently, it turned into something that sorta means a lot to me. It's a collab between me and Airyu, my newfound bestest friend. The poem has no small amount of personal significance attached to it, but we've managed to turn our story into another story, while keeping it rhyming and with some semblance of a meter V:
Otter, otter, in the water, swim swim swim.
Zooming, grooming, fish-consuming. Swim swim swim.
How many fish are in your dish? Swim swim swim.
Otter, otter, in the water, swim swim swim.
But recently, it turned into something that sorta means a lot to me. It's a collab between me and Airyu, my newfound bestest friend. The poem has no small amount of personal significance attached to it, but we've managed to turn our story into another story, while keeping it rhyming and with some semblance of a meter V:
Category Poetry / All
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THIS MADE ME SQUEE THE ENTIRE TIME I WAS READING IT.
I read it to Jason and every other line I was like, "AAWW THIS IS SO CUTE."
I LOVE the way it rhymes and how smoothly many of the lines flow from the mouth. I found it super easy to read and super easy to give a "beat" if you know what I mean. :D
BEST POEM EVER <3 <3 <3
I read it to Jason and every other line I was like, "AAWW THIS IS SO CUTE."
I LOVE the way it rhymes and how smoothly many of the lines flow from the mouth. I found it super easy to read and super easy to give a "beat" if you know what I mean. :D
BEST POEM EVER <3 <3 <3
Thanks ^_____^ I'm glad you liked it!
There were points where meter was sacrificed to get the meaning across. Staying within English's rhyme scheme while getting the message across was tough - but the "she's falling, falling down, falling toward the water" part was intentionally meant to be a bit less "flowy" as to sorta convey that something's changing there - the critters aren't sad as usual, nor are they happily together yet: they're starting to transition from ":(" to "^___^" . Guess it doesn't stick out as much when the rest of the poem doesn't adhere to a strict meter rolol V:
There were points where meter was sacrificed to get the meaning across. Staying within English's rhyme scheme while getting the message across was tough - but the "she's falling, falling down, falling toward the water" part was intentionally meant to be a bit less "flowy" as to sorta convey that something's changing there - the critters aren't sad as usual, nor are they happily together yet: they're starting to transition from ":(" to "^___^" . Guess it doesn't stick out as much when the rest of the poem doesn't adhere to a strict meter rolol V:
Yay~ Thank you for posting this! I love it to pieces (I love you more though <3).
Your comment though, "The poem has no small amount of personal significance attached to it" ... it has a lot of personal significance attached to it. I think that's a typo. ^^;
Anyhow, I will draw each stanza, yes yes yes~^^
Your comment though, "The poem has no small amount of personal significance attached to it" ... it has a lot of personal significance attached to it. I think that's a typo. ^^;
Anyhow, I will draw each stanza, yes yes yes~^^
whoa whoa whoa WHEN DID YOU GET A FA *head explodes*
And I think I have it right!
the poem has
no
"small amount of personal significance"
Thus, there is not a "small amount" but a "large amount". Judging by your texts and the fact you posted this at 3AM tells me you're not in the right mind to parse English, love >:(
Also: Hip hip hooray! The poem grows, beyond mere rhyming text. If it do such wondrous things, I wonder what is next?
And I think I have it right!
the poem has
no
"small amount of personal significance"
Thus, there is not a "small amount" but a "large amount". Judging by your texts and the fact you posted this at 3AM tells me you're not in the right mind to parse English, love >:(
Also: Hip hip hooray! The poem grows, beyond mere rhyming text. If it do such wondrous things, I wonder what is next?
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