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It was early in the morning. Two teenage German Shepherds, Ashley and Rebecca, were sitting quietly at the kitchen table. Ashley was reading one of her romance books while Rebecca stared at the bowl of cereal in front of her, watching the rainbow loops bounce into each other.
“Ash, what do you think about dates?” Rebecca asked, breaking the comfortable silence that had settled between them.
Ashley slowly looked up from her book and stared curiously at her sister, her brow furrowed in thought. “Like dinner-and-a-movie kind of dates? Or…?” She paused, closing her book and sitting up. “Wait, is this a trick? You’re not gonna try hooking me up with one of your loser friends, are you?” she asked, staring suspiciously at her older sibling.
Rebecca chuckled and shook her head. “No, no, I mean… Do you think we should wait until we’re older and more mature before we start dating?”
Ashley tilted her head, considering. “I guess so? Wait, why are you asking me these questions? You usually talk to Mom about this stuff.”
Rebecca smirked and quietly chuckled. “Well, I tried talking to Mom, but she wouldn't shut up about how I was still too young to be thinking about guys. So I figured I'd ask you.”
Ashley couldn’t help but laugh. Their mother was notorious for her long-winded rants and lectures. “Yeah, Mom can really be a chatterbox sometimes. So, uh, where is this coming from, anyway? Why are you asking about all this dating stuff?”
Rebecca sighed and crossed her arms, her ears lowered slightly. “My friends always talk about who’s dating who, and how wonderful their dates are, and sometimes I just… I feel like I’m missing out.”
Ashley gave her sister a sympathetic look and smiled. “Hey, don’t worry about it. Dating is complicated, not to mention really messy. If you don’t think you’re ready to handle something like that, then don’t force yourself to jump into it. It'll happen when the time is right.”
“Besides, you don’t want to jump into a random relationship with a rockstar who lives in his van and snores like a freight train, do you?” Ashley joked.
Rebecca smirked and thought for a moment. “Hmmm… I don’t know. Does this rockstar guy like Kesha?”
The two sisters shared a laugh, and as they calmed down, Ashley reached across the table and patted her sister's hand, giving her a warm, reassuring smile.
“Don't worry, Becca. You'll find someone who loves you for you, and that's what's most important. Just try not to stress yourself out over it, okay? Besides, I don't think Mom would be very happy if you brought home a boy she didn't approve of. You might never see him again after that!"
Rebecca giggled at the thought, and Ashley grinned, glad to see her sister in higher spirits. "Now, eat up before your cereal gets soggy. We have school in an hour, and I don’t want to be grounded because you were late again, especially after last night."
Rebecca rolled her eyes and smiled. “Hey, sis… thanks. I don’t know what I would do without you."
Ashley smirked. "Well, you'd have to deal with Mom's lectures alone, for one thing."
"That's true," Rebecca replied as she took a bite of her cereal.
Ashley opened her book once again and began to read, occasionally glancing up and smiling as her sister ate her breakfast.
Two years later...
“Hurry up, nerd, some of us have to take a crap!” Rebecca announced from the other side of the bathroom door.
“Just give me five minutes, and do you really have to announce that to the entire house!?” Ashley yelled from within the bathroom.
“Do you really have to use the bathroom for half an hour!? What are you doing in there, anyway? You better not be reading that stupid romance book of yours!” Rebecca replied.
After a few seconds, Ashley emerged from the bathroom. She glared at her sister. "First of all, my romance books are not stupid, and second, it's called hygiene, look it up. It's not my fault you didn't use the bathroom before bed."
Rebecca snorted and walked past her, entering the bathroom and shutting the door behind her. "Whatever, nerd!”
“Ash, what do you think about dates?” Rebecca asked, breaking the comfortable silence that had settled between them.
Ashley slowly looked up from her book and stared curiously at her sister, her brow furrowed in thought. “Like dinner-and-a-movie kind of dates? Or…?” She paused, closing her book and sitting up. “Wait, is this a trick? You’re not gonna try hooking me up with one of your loser friends, are you?” she asked, staring suspiciously at her older sibling.
Rebecca chuckled and shook her head. “No, no, I mean… Do you think we should wait until we’re older and more mature before we start dating?”
Ashley tilted her head, considering. “I guess so? Wait, why are you asking me these questions? You usually talk to Mom about this stuff.”
Rebecca smirked and quietly chuckled. “Well, I tried talking to Mom, but she wouldn't shut up about how I was still too young to be thinking about guys. So I figured I'd ask you.”
Ashley couldn’t help but laugh. Their mother was notorious for her long-winded rants and lectures. “Yeah, Mom can really be a chatterbox sometimes. So, uh, where is this coming from, anyway? Why are you asking about all this dating stuff?”
Rebecca sighed and crossed her arms, her ears lowered slightly. “My friends always talk about who’s dating who, and how wonderful their dates are, and sometimes I just… I feel like I’m missing out.”
Ashley gave her sister a sympathetic look and smiled. “Hey, don’t worry about it. Dating is complicated, not to mention really messy. If you don’t think you’re ready to handle something like that, then don’t force yourself to jump into it. It'll happen when the time is right.”
“Besides, you don’t want to jump into a random relationship with a rockstar who lives in his van and snores like a freight train, do you?” Ashley joked.
Rebecca smirked and thought for a moment. “Hmmm… I don’t know. Does this rockstar guy like Kesha?”
The two sisters shared a laugh, and as they calmed down, Ashley reached across the table and patted her sister's hand, giving her a warm, reassuring smile.
“Don't worry, Becca. You'll find someone who loves you for you, and that's what's most important. Just try not to stress yourself out over it, okay? Besides, I don't think Mom would be very happy if you brought home a boy she didn't approve of. You might never see him again after that!"
Rebecca giggled at the thought, and Ashley grinned, glad to see her sister in higher spirits. "Now, eat up before your cereal gets soggy. We have school in an hour, and I don’t want to be grounded because you were late again, especially after last night."
Rebecca rolled her eyes and smiled. “Hey, sis… thanks. I don’t know what I would do without you."
Ashley smirked. "Well, you'd have to deal with Mom's lectures alone, for one thing."
"That's true," Rebecca replied as she took a bite of her cereal.
Ashley opened her book once again and began to read, occasionally glancing up and smiling as her sister ate her breakfast.
Two years later...
“Hurry up, nerd, some of us have to take a crap!” Rebecca announced from the other side of the bathroom door.
“Just give me five minutes, and do you really have to announce that to the entire house!?” Ashley yelled from within the bathroom.
“Do you really have to use the bathroom for half an hour!? What are you doing in there, anyway? You better not be reading that stupid romance book of yours!” Rebecca replied.
After a few seconds, Ashley emerged from the bathroom. She glared at her sister. "First of all, my romance books are not stupid, and second, it's called hygiene, look it up. It's not my fault you didn't use the bathroom before bed."
Rebecca snorted and walked past her, entering the bathroom and shutting the door behind her. "Whatever, nerd!”
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Well good to see you doing something new.
Remember to reinforce and use your anthropomorphic traits. They are lacking here.
"It was early in the morning. Two teenage German Shepherds, Ashley and Rebecca, were sitting quietly at the kitchen table." This telling. Remember to attach your beginnings to characters to shape better scene and make it living.
Make sure to find a point to leave your audience with. You kind of just do a time jump and leave the audience with nothing here besides a inferred joke.
Repeat sentence structure. Nearly every sentence here is character doing blank. Its short which does not help. Your free to break this up with the adjective and the verb. A place for those anthropomorphic traits.
Remember to reinforce and use your anthropomorphic traits. They are lacking here.
"It was early in the morning. Two teenage German Shepherds, Ashley and Rebecca, were sitting quietly at the kitchen table." This telling. Remember to attach your beginnings to characters to shape better scene and make it living.
Make sure to find a point to leave your audience with. You kind of just do a time jump and leave the audience with nothing here besides a inferred joke.
Repeat sentence structure. Nearly every sentence here is character doing blank. Its short which does not help. Your free to break this up with the adjective and the verb. A place for those anthropomorphic traits.
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