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The sky awaits you, O Blue-Eyed Falcon,
She remembers the touch of your wings;
She wishes to feel you dance again,
And she's calling to you as she sings:
"O Blue-Eyed Falcon, Break free! Break free!
Rekindle your spirit to fly,
For the sun is shining and I long to hear
The Blue Eyed Falcon's cry!"
(©2011 Cassander)
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Inspired by
's painting, A Glimpse of Sky.
I've always had an odd fondness for ballad stanzas and decided to go with my own little anapesticish variation on them here.
(critique welcome)
(Image by Brenda Lyons (windfalcon) and used with permission.)
She remembers the touch of your wings;
She wishes to feel you dance again,
And she's calling to you as she sings:
"O Blue-Eyed Falcon, Break free! Break free!
Rekindle your spirit to fly,
For the sun is shining and I long to hear
The Blue Eyed Falcon's cry!"
(©2011 Cassander)
---
Inspired by
's painting, A Glimpse of Sky. I've always had an odd fondness for ballad stanzas and decided to go with my own little anapesticish variation on them here.
(critique welcome)
(Image by Brenda Lyons (windfalcon) and used with permission.)
Category Poetry / All
Species Avian (Other)
Size 120 x 120px
File Size 25.9 kB
Thank you.
The last two lines are a bit of a metrical reversal from the rest of the poem in that the tetrameter has three extra unaccented syllables while the trimeter has none. In all the other pairs, the tetrameters have only one extra unaccented syllable while the trimeters always have two or three.
Anyway, here's what I was imagining for the last two lines:
for the SUN is SHINing and i LONG to HEAR
the BLUE-eyed FALcon's CRY
The last two lines are a bit of a metrical reversal from the rest of the poem in that the tetrameter has three extra unaccented syllables while the trimeter has none. In all the other pairs, the tetrameters have only one extra unaccented syllable while the trimeters always have two or three.
Anyway, here's what I was imagining for the last two lines:
for the SUN is SHINing and i LONG to HEAR
the BLUE-eyed FALcon's CRY
Well, this is the first of my recent poems to use anything resembling a regular meter. I can see that the second-to-last line does kind of stretch the meter a bit, but it seemed to give me the rhythm I wanted. Actually, just about the only parts I kept intact from the first draft of this poem were the first two lines and the last two lines. I rewrote the rest.
Of course. There's a link in the description, actually, but here it is again:
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/5687461
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/5687461
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