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For those who haven't read the first chapter, I suggest you do that before reading this one: https://www.furaffinity.net/view/55684279/
For this week's
Thursday_Prompt. I'll be honest, I've been having a real rough time writing recently. Most of the time I sit down and get about two paragraphs out before feeling like I can't figure out the proper words or Bella shows up and starts bothering me enough to knock me out of the groove. I had this partially done already and had a brief mention of using a match to light a candle so figured good enough. I still only covered half of what I intended for chapter two of Ren's story. Actually, that's not true, I didn't cover anything of what I intended for chapter two. Still, I thought this was a good opportunity to add some minor characterization and world building (thank god Elior doesn't know anything and so I have an excuse for Ren to explain it).
I'll probably relabel these stories with a proper title once I can figure one out. I'm not sure The Adventures of Ren, the Super Sexy Tod is really fitting the vibe I want with these.
Prompt: Match
Length: 4153 words
Hopefully I can get into the groove once more (I know there's a story I owe), but work has been draining and I find it easier to draw than write these days.
For this week's
Thursday_Prompt. I'll be honest, I've been having a real rough time writing recently. Most of the time I sit down and get about two paragraphs out before feeling like I can't figure out the proper words or Bella shows up and starts bothering me enough to knock me out of the groove. I had this partially done already and had a brief mention of using a match to light a candle so figured good enough. I still only covered half of what I intended for chapter two of Ren's story. Actually, that's not true, I didn't cover anything of what I intended for chapter two. Still, I thought this was a good opportunity to add some minor characterization and world building (thank god Elior doesn't know anything and so I have an excuse for Ren to explain it).I'll probably relabel these stories with a proper title once I can figure one out. I'm not sure The Adventures of Ren, the Super Sexy Tod is really fitting the vibe I want with these.
Prompt: Match
Length: 4153 words
Hopefully I can get into the groove once more (I know there's a story I owe), but work has been draining and I find it easier to draw than write these days.
Category Story / Fantasy
Species Red Fox
Size 120 x 120px
File Size 76.1 kB
Listed in Folders
Quite the exciting little test marking the true beginning to the group's journey! Such a vivid and exhilarating fight scene! I also loved the tid-bits of world building you trickled in along with Ren's nonchalance when it comes to explaining history during the middle of their escape from the dark elf fortress.
Well worth the wait though it did leave me wanting more!
Well worth the wait though it did leave me wanting more!
I'm with Elior, Ren is definetly overconfident!
And I'm also with Kelik, I hate it when superiors ask you to be informal with them. No, you are not my friend.
What does an ilmoren look like?
And that is a creepy frigging monster!
And purely because you ask -
"The cross fox traced his fingers along the a set of stone engraving"
"“What is?” the Elior asked"
"The pair creeped across the stone floor, the only sound coming from the click of Kelik’s caws against it."
And I'm also with Kelik, I hate it when superiors ask you to be informal with them. No, you are not my friend.
What does an ilmoren look like?
And that is a creepy frigging monster!
And purely because you ask -
"The cross fox traced his fingers along the a set of stone engraving"
"“What is?” the Elior asked"
"The pair creeped across the stone floor, the only sound coming from the click of Kelik’s caws against it."
Hopefully his overconfidence doesn't get them all killed.
Well they've been best friends (and a bit more) since they were kits. So Ren going off for his studies and coming back to Kelik acting like this has kind of peeved him.
Ilmoren are kind of like martens, though they have long shimmering tails with greenish fur that can glow with magic. They also have the ability to walk on the air for limited amounts of time. They're known for glowing through the night sky as they dance through the air. I actually have kind of an issue because all of the plant and animal life in this world is unique and not of earth. At the same time, I don't want to go and insert tons of pointless details where it doesn't really matter.
Yep, creepy monster is creepy. It's pretty terrifying how it can adapt itself as the fight goes along. Cover my eyes? I'll grow a bunch of new ones. Destroy those eyes? I'll make the new set reinforced.
And thanks for all of the typo issues.
Well they've been best friends (and a bit more) since they were kits. So Ren going off for his studies and coming back to Kelik acting like this has kind of peeved him.
Ilmoren are kind of like martens, though they have long shimmering tails with greenish fur that can glow with magic. They also have the ability to walk on the air for limited amounts of time. They're known for glowing through the night sky as they dance through the air. I actually have kind of an issue because all of the plant and animal life in this world is unique and not of earth. At the same time, I don't want to go and insert tons of pointless details where it doesn't really matter.
Yep, creepy monster is creepy. It's pretty terrifying how it can adapt itself as the fight goes along. Cover my eyes? I'll grow a bunch of new ones. Destroy those eyes? I'll make the new set reinforced.
And thanks for all of the typo issues.
Well that would be a depressing end to the story. And Ren is far too sexy for that to happen to him anyway.
Ah I see, well that does explain their relationship! And those sound awesome, you've set up quite a challenge for yourself to come up with unique fauna and flora.
Probably the scariest part is that it's the first monster they've encountered, the others are probably worse!
n/p!
Ah I see, well that does explain their relationship! And those sound awesome, you've set up quite a challenge for yourself to come up with unique fauna and flora.
Probably the scariest part is that it's the first monster they've encountered, the others are probably worse!
n/p!
“I hate it when superiors ask you to be informal with them.” Interestingly enough, I’ve never actually had a job where I was expected to address the boss in a formal manner. Even the CEO of the company I’m currently at does the first name basis thing.
For some of those bosses, the informality did serve to reduce stuffiness and tension. For others all it did was create an entirely false sense of approachability and friendliness.
For some of those bosses, the informality did serve to reduce stuffiness and tension. For others all it did was create an entirely false sense of approachability and friendliness.
Yeah, I've never been in a position where I had to interact with anyone formally like that. I mean for my job when we still went into the office, no one even dressed formally. Shorts, t-shirts, and sandals were super common for everyone except for the actual finance and business teams and no one interacted with them on a daily basis.
Still, I think there's kind of a difference here in that his is more formality due to status of birth rather than employment. I personally feel that I, myself, would be somewhat uncomfortable having such formal titles applied to me, especially if the relationship wasn't nearly as formal before.
Still, I think there's kind of a difference here in that his is more formality due to status of birth rather than employment. I personally feel that I, myself, would be somewhat uncomfortable having such formal titles applied to me, especially if the relationship wasn't nearly as formal before.
Ah, but Ren by his very presence fills the story with super sexy vibes. Not many can pull off calling someone “my lady” without it sounding cringy nowadays.
In all seriousness, this was a great continuation with probably the best action scene I’ve read from you. Very enjoyable!
In all seriousness, this was a great continuation with probably the best action scene I’ve read from you. Very enjoyable!
I think he can pull it off because of how he uses it. He doesn't just tack it on at the end, but rather weaves it in more natural places. It's really fun to write his dialog. I remove all contractions and try and make it more formal with a higher complexity of vocabulary. Gives him a nice unique voice.
Thanks. I've been trying to get back at writing these action scenes. This one was pretty fun. I'm never sure on the number of action beats (that always worries me about making it too short or too long), but I'm glad it worked.
Thanks. I've been trying to get back at writing these action scenes. This one was pretty fun. I'm never sure on the number of action beats (that always worries me about making it too short or too long), but I'm glad it worked.
Sorry you are having a rough time with writing :( I love this story though! Sounds like you have so much still to cover, but that's fine!
I love Elior (I mean, who doesn't!) and she's really keeping her cool in this honestly difficult and unexpected adventure she's suddenly having. I just hope the prince can keep his promise!
I think the title fits, super sexy indeed.
I love Elior (I mean, who doesn't!) and she's really keeping her cool in this honestly difficult and unexpected adventure she's suddenly having. I just hope the prince can keep his promise!
I think the title fits, super sexy indeed.
Yeah, this is going to be a long journey for them, all the way from one from one end of a continent to the other on foot. So something like 4k miles.
Elior's kind of has to have be. At this point it's either follow these two crazy foxes into wherever or go back into the fortress to end up killed or turned into a slave. She is also nice for me in that she acts as a rather ignorant character for the deeper mysteries and history of the world so I have someone who Ren can exposit to. Not to say she's dumb of anything, but she's more street smart and I'm sure she'll have plenty of moments to educate these vulpines on surviving when not in their protected castles and study halls.
Elior's kind of has to have be. At this point it's either follow these two crazy foxes into wherever or go back into the fortress to end up killed or turned into a slave. She is also nice for me in that she acts as a rather ignorant character for the deeper mysteries and history of the world so I have someone who Ren can exposit to. Not to say she's dumb of anything, but she's more street smart and I'm sure she'll have plenty of moments to educate these vulpines on surviving when not in their protected castles and study halls.
Haha, Ren is so smug. That first paragraph on the eight page was really cool, or how he assured her later.
Just as Strand said it's an achiement to pull off saying "my lady" without being cringe.
I liked the fight and how it got a little bit frantic. If they struggled so much with just one creature, I am afraid of what will be next since it was only the beginning. One of them may die. I hope that Ren takes more stuff to be used as a weapon supported by his magic.
It's a really cool adventure overall.
Just as Strand said it's an achiement to pull off saying "my lady" without being cringe.
I liked the fight and how it got a little bit frantic. If they struggled so much with just one creature, I am afraid of what will be next since it was only the beginning. One of them may die. I hope that Ren takes more stuff to be used as a weapon supported by his magic.
It's a really cool adventure overall.
Thanks a bunch, Blaze, and thanks for the fav.
I remember in the last chapter you finding the Ren and Kelik to come off too much like paladins. Hopefully, he's a bit more enjoyable now that he's being a bit less serious (Kelik is still a stick in the mud, but that just makes him good to tease).
Hopefully they're more prepared for what's to come. Things could definitely be getting a bit dicey.
I remember in the last chapter you finding the Ren and Kelik to come off too much like paladins. Hopefully, he's a bit more enjoyable now that he's being a bit less serious (Kelik is still a stick in the mud, but that just makes him good to tease).
Hopefully they're more prepared for what's to come. Things could definitely be getting a bit dicey.
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