This is really detailed work, a lot better then most people can do (including myelf). However, I was a little overwhelmed with the lack of scene breaking. I kept getting sucked in to the next panel without meaning to. It's not so much as I don't know which panel to read first, it's like, my eye wants to examine the whole page at once from there being no obvious line breaks. I know boxes are sometimes too cliche, but maybe something else could break it up?

Anyway, the character are very cool, and I like the writing style, however at the bottom of the page, the last two images on the right are starting to warp out of shape, The Commander is very sloped, which makes him look odd, maybe use some guiding lines and ruler next time? However, I can't complain too much, since I'm very much guilty of this myself. In any sense, this is fantastic, very detailed, and drew me in. Great job. :)

I echo WolvenRemorse's suggestion that the individual panels need to be broken up a bit more. Also, the Commander's speech font is a bit difficult to read, for me. Maybe enlarge it slightly? The perspective in the large middle panel is also slightly off. The background looks fantastic, but the perspective angles on the characters are off. The shoulders, hips and feet should all follow the same angle. You have the shoulders and hips on a straight line, but the feet are angled with the rest of the background which makes the characters look like their legs are twisted.

Problem areas:
- Character perspective
- Font

Strengths:
-Background detail
-Background perspective