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Taking place in the Tracey's Story-verse, we take a peek in the life of Ariel, a teenaged otter girl whose school is implementing a new precautionary measure to help any MSers who may have not yet had their conditions manifest...
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Category Story / Baby fur
Species Otter
Size 50 x 50px
File Size 18.4 kB
Listed in Folders
So, solid work, not too many typos. Dialogue punctuation is halfway there, but has a few hiccups. Also, unless I'm missing context from a different part of your series, it's Minor, not Miner. One is an age group, the other a profession or task ;P
https://editorsmanual.com/articles/.....uate-dialogue/
I'm on mobile, so you'll have to excuse me providing self-directed study instead of pointing out the individual cases.
Good luck with writing future entries!
https://editorsmanual.com/articles/.....uate-dialogue/
I'm on mobile, so you'll have to excuse me providing self-directed study instead of pointing out the individual cases.
Good luck with writing future entries!
Interesting beginning to a new story. I already like the teacher!
Just to be clear, this is a different school than the one Tracey, Nora, and Lyra attend?
So, we now know the names of several countries within the "Traceyverse".
Is Bioux pronounced "bye-yoo" or "bee-yoo"?
Sorry if I've been quiet for a while, I've been sick these last two weeks. The pollen is horrible here.
Just to be clear, this is a different school than the one Tracey, Nora, and Lyra attend?
So, we now know the names of several countries within the "Traceyverse".
Is Bioux pronounced "bye-yoo" or "bee-yoo"?
Sorry if I've been quiet for a while, I've been sick these last two weeks. The pollen is horrible here.
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