Yay! More Zera.

Overall this was a nice contemplative scene. Now, I want to know what she did to put herself in this position though.

I'm glad you seem to like Zera, she is a fun character to play with. Admittedly though, I think I may have made her seem a bit more timid than I had originally planned for her in this one.

My plan was to also include the scene that led to her exchange with Leon, though that would have probably tacked on an extra four pages by itself so I said I'll just save that for an actual chapter.

I'm grateful you'd take the time to read over this one, thanks much for that.

Good scene building. Zera really shines here.

It means a lot to hear you say so as I was a bit worried that maybe I was a bit off with the character personality I had established for Zera in previous Thursday Prompts.

Thank you very much for reading through this, very much appreciated.

A nice calm slice of life. I enjoy these. Hope Zera's going to be alright, it sounded like she got injured quite badly.

I'm excited to hear you thought this one went over well. Don't worry too much about Zera though, it's healing.

Thanks much for taking the time to go through this one, very grateful for that.

Awww, it was a nice story. Were there any stories with Zera between the one from 5 months ago and this one? And she has probably fluffy fur and very pointy ears! So technically a fox like that could get used to the cold and use their fur to keep warm! Maybe.

I also share Rodih's sentiment with the curiosity regarding what she did earlier. If you post that then I'll read that for sure. :P

Has it really already been five months? Yikes... where does the time go? Anyways, yes, I've done just a few bits and pieces with Zera and plan to do more through the prompt while I think up the larger story.

It'd probably take a bit for the weather to really bother Zera given her fur, so it was a bit of a weak point on my part. Though, she doesn't quite have the coat of an artic, so it might still get to her if she doesn't sit by the fire. I'm also very glad to hear I managed to get you a bit interested in what happened to Zera leading up to this scene; I do hope to when I finally get it done that you find it at least somewhat interesting.

I greatly appreciate that you'd look over this one, thanks much for that.

Regarding the time I saw one time this thing and I thought it would be actually so amazing in reality, lol. Time passes very quickly for me too.

Also it isn't a weak point on your part at all! Just a thought I had about her fur that was inspired only by my affinity for it! Fur Affinity! Y-yeah... But of course the fur would have to be really thick to provide good enough insulation from cold.

I love in your stories this kind of descriptive physical sensations, like here with this cold or like with drinking sea water in another story. I think it works very well for imagination and immersion. This story made me feel like in Skyrim for example, despite it being a small window into one event among many that were happening during that time! Regarding the lead up to this scene I think it's best to avoid worrying how it might be perceived and it's best to just have fun with writing and everything that's related to your enjoyment. I always do that when writing myself and I think it's okay!

I thought this was very nicely done FtD... you're doing so well with your stories...

Vix

I'm very grateful to hear you thought I did this one well and that my stories are coming along well enough. I very much appreciate all the guidance and feedback you've provided as well as you taking the time to simply read over these; always thankful for that.

*smiles… that’s what the TP is all about.

Vix

That was a very pleasant story. It nicely captures the feel of a restful (albeit rather chilly) night amidst a dangerous adventure. Fortunately it seems like Zera’s got a good team to help keep her safe.

I look forward to more from this series.

Still a little iffy on some of the corny dialogue, but I am very glad to hear you thought the story came out well enough. Zera's in good hands, she's just a bit headstrong is all (and Krane smells, like, really, really bad).

Thanks much for reading through it, I very much appreciate it.

This was a wonderful read! I really enjoyed Zera, and need to go find more of her adventures! (or maybe I've already read some and forgot lol).

I'm grateful you'd say you thought this one went well. There are bits and pieces that could do with a tune up, but it means a lot to hear you say 'good job'.

Thank you much for taking the time to read over it, very much grateful for that.

It was a little busy at the start, but came together nicely as it progressed. The focus on the nonverbal expressions amidst all of the dialogue was a good juxtaposition separating out what appear to be the two more main characters here from the rest of the bunch.

One thing that stuck out to me was the persistence of the sound of her nervous flicking around of the revolver throughout the entire scene.

Well, there's always room for improvement, but I very much appreciate you saying you thought it progressively got a bit better. I'm also glad to hear you thought I managed the expressions and thoughts of the more prominent characters of the group; I was a bit worried that maybe things were getting a bit too vague on that front.

Perhaps if you find some time, you might join in the Thursday Prompt sometime? Chapter 3 of "Soulless" would have perfectly fit last week's prompt after all.

I'm very grateful that you'd take the time to read through this, thank you very much for that.

I don't think you have any issues with being vague. It may just be me, but I actually got what felt like a bit of sensory overload during the setting up of the scene due to the level of detail in which things were described. I think what is more important is that you find a way to leave important yet subtle details in that don't get drowned out by the background noise. There's a lot to be said about something otherwise silent standing out louder than the cantankerous voices in the background of an outdoor gathering--the twitching of an ear, indirect eye contact, or the nervous fidgeting of the gun. It's a lot like painting--every little detail counts, but you don't want things getting lost in overly colorful noise.

I'll keep an eye on that prompt thing... I'm a bit buried in a backlog of my own work at the moment. And taking the time to look at this is the least I can do with you checking out my stuff.

I understand what you are saying and fully agree; I do tend to go a bit overboard simply trying to set up the scene before getting into the story proper. I'm really good at adding a bunch of fluff that really doesn't add much to the overall story and that is something I really need to work on.

Please do check in on the prompt if you have the opportunity. If nothing else, the prompt may be a good source of inspiration for future works. Though, please don't feel you have to look over any of my things simply because I'm enjoying your story, anything I post is pretty amateur at best anyway. I'm thoroughly enjoying "Soulless" and looking forward to more.