ROFL! That gave me a good chuckle. Didn't expect the sudden galley ejection. XD

Honestly a good chuckle is all I can truly ask for in life in my creative endevours!

You have good pacing, which is really difficult to do well. As a writer, I see a few problems... but if you ever need help or want to confirm something, drop me a note and I'll do my best to level you up. ;3

I'm the kind of person who's always down for harsh unsolicited concrit on anything I do. My feelings are nigh impossible to hurt and even if I end up finding the concrit incorrect or uninformed of what certain narrative events purpose is I find it just as important of an exercise to practice decoding what to actually DO with outside advice/suggestion/criticism, etc.

Admittedly my usual standard for story craft is significantly more thorough than this 15 page project was. This was more about having been burnt out on comics for 3 years and wanting to do something within a certain page limit, and completed in a certain time limit and seeing how it feels to work in sets of 4 with the tools available, so it had no beta reader at any stage or editor.

Regardless feel free to leave whatever critique you feel like. It may not change this now finished project but I can put it in my pocket for later use

That's a similar mentality to the one I have with my own work. Any comment is welcomed, gives a different perspective that just didn't think about and is an area where I can raise the quality of work that I produce going forward!

I know how it feels to hate something you've dedicated a stupid amount of time creating only to see its mediocrity. I hadn't written anything enjoyable in the last four years, and every time I tried to get back on that horse was met with unfun stress. Now that I've gotten myself out of that hole, writing what I want is fun again. =3
I'm happy to see you got through your own slump and gave yourself a challenge to get back on that horse of yours!

I'll give you a watch and check on your work from time to time, see how you're progressing. Maybe give an opinion about a thing or two even. I won't bullshit you though, promise!

He looks like such a sexy little goofball.
So throwable in every continuity.

His name should be foot ball because he's gonna get the foot to the ball(butt)