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This is yet another installment of my writing challenge that I've spoken about in the past. For those that are unfamiliar, the idea is to take a single scene or idea, and be able to just write it, as-is. No bells, no whistles, no frills, no glitter, just write the damn story! I've never been able to do that very well, hence the challenge!
This one is really short. In fact, it's so short that I’m not sure if it's even told the story I needed it to tell. I'll let you all decide for yourselves; comments, as always, are most welcome.
This one, for those of you that aren't familiar with some of my longer works, is also, technically, a Chi'Garrian Chronicles story. I never call the big tiger-cat-creature in this story by name or race, but that's really what he is, a Ma'idrae Chi'Garrian. Nor do I tell any of the story leading up to this scene. This story is about one thing, and one thing only: a hug. In that respect, you'll have to tell me if I managed to capture the emotions and essence of a hug with these few words. Once again, I'll have to leave you to be the judge.
Disclaimer: I hate to have to put this on here, but this work of written fiction is copyright me. Please do not distribute, copy, alter, etc, without my permission. Having said all that, feel free to download and use it for your own inspiration, amusement, laughter, etc, etc.
This one is really short. In fact, it's so short that I’m not sure if it's even told the story I needed it to tell. I'll let you all decide for yourselves; comments, as always, are most welcome.
This one, for those of you that aren't familiar with some of my longer works, is also, technically, a Chi'Garrian Chronicles story. I never call the big tiger-cat-creature in this story by name or race, but that's really what he is, a Ma'idrae Chi'Garrian. Nor do I tell any of the story leading up to this scene. This story is about one thing, and one thing only: a hug. In that respect, you'll have to tell me if I managed to capture the emotions and essence of a hug with these few words. Once again, I'll have to leave you to be the judge.
Disclaimer: I hate to have to put this on here, but this work of written fiction is copyright me. Please do not distribute, copy, alter, etc, without my permission. Having said all that, feel free to download and use it for your own inspiration, amusement, laughter, etc, etc.
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*Thinking how much he could use a hug like that from someone right now...*
Short story indeed. I had to read this two times in order to find out just why i didn't feel anything while reading it(Sorry).
Basically, there is to much explaining here. The things that happen, and the small amout of feelings that are buildt up in the beginning, are forgotten while reading about everything that you are trying to show us. So in that, if feelings were the things you wanted me to feel, you sort of didn't make it. But notice that i say "sort of":)
This scene was so well explained, so detailed in what happened, that when i was done reading it, i remembered the whole thing and could easily "replay" it in my head. This time, the words aren't in the way, and i can just sit back and see the whole thing take place in my head.
What i couldn't do when i was reading, was imagen the hug itself and the feelings surrounding it, because there were to many words to read:p(Ironic, since you think it may not be enough words to get everything through to us;). But afterwards, closing my eyes and seing the whole thing take place in my head, i can easily put myself in the place of the main character, get a taste of what he's feeling(But not nearly to the same degree), and then experience the hug and comfort he's getting from the big tiger, myself:)
The brain is such a nifty thing to have^^, Even if i couldn't feel anything while reading the story, i was still able to so afterwards. So in that, the story pass if it's up to me;)
Short story indeed. I had to read this two times in order to find out just why i didn't feel anything while reading it(Sorry).
Basically, there is to much explaining here. The things that happen, and the small amout of feelings that are buildt up in the beginning, are forgotten while reading about everything that you are trying to show us. So in that, if feelings were the things you wanted me to feel, you sort of didn't make it. But notice that i say "sort of":)
This scene was so well explained, so detailed in what happened, that when i was done reading it, i remembered the whole thing and could easily "replay" it in my head. This time, the words aren't in the way, and i can just sit back and see the whole thing take place in my head.
What i couldn't do when i was reading, was imagen the hug itself and the feelings surrounding it, because there were to many words to read:p(Ironic, since you think it may not be enough words to get everything through to us;). But afterwards, closing my eyes and seing the whole thing take place in my head, i can easily put myself in the place of the main character, get a taste of what he's feeling(But not nearly to the same degree), and then experience the hug and comfort he's getting from the big tiger, myself:)
The brain is such a nifty thing to have^^, Even if i couldn't feel anything while reading the story, i was still able to so afterwards. So in that, the story pass if it's up to me;)
*Exuse me for replying when i'm dead tired, but i've just gotta clear out some comments so that i have less to do tomorrow:p*
Oh yea, the story totally worked;) Sometimes i just don't get into a story until i think about it later on. Sort of like when you are reading a school book. You get nothing when you read it at first, but wait until your brain starts prosessing what it read, then it all makes sense! And you just feel really stupid since you didn't get it the first time around:p
You remember i told you about me not liking other books and stuff? Well, that's mostly cos i don't get them... I don't know why that is, but it's like that with pretty much every book i try to read. I get into chapter two, sometimes all the way to chapter three, but then i'll start getting all lost and don't understand whats happening anymore:S It sucks, and that's what almost happened with this story i think:( But for some reason, i managed to get everything anyway. Most likely cos it was VERY well explained and detailed. I can't really tell how i got it, cos i don't really know how my brain works:p I've never had this problem with any of your other works, so... I dunno...
But the point got across in the end;) And i did like it when i first could see what happened:) (I AM gonna tell you how my imagination works one day:p)
Oh... I wish i could get a hug right now:s I just feel all alone here now:S It's so quiet here, no birds outside yet, no cars, only the sound of my keyboard and computer fan... I've been chatting with my friends for HOURS tonight, ALL night actually, and i just logged off from them... I should have stayed just a bit longer:p
Oh yea, the story totally worked;) Sometimes i just don't get into a story until i think about it later on. Sort of like when you are reading a school book. You get nothing when you read it at first, but wait until your brain starts prosessing what it read, then it all makes sense! And you just feel really stupid since you didn't get it the first time around:p
You remember i told you about me not liking other books and stuff? Well, that's mostly cos i don't get them... I don't know why that is, but it's like that with pretty much every book i try to read. I get into chapter two, sometimes all the way to chapter three, but then i'll start getting all lost and don't understand whats happening anymore:S It sucks, and that's what almost happened with this story i think:( But for some reason, i managed to get everything anyway. Most likely cos it was VERY well explained and detailed. I can't really tell how i got it, cos i don't really know how my brain works:p I've never had this problem with any of your other works, so... I dunno...
But the point got across in the end;) And i did like it when i first could see what happened:) (I AM gonna tell you how my imagination works one day:p)
Oh... I wish i could get a hug right now:s I just feel all alone here now:S It's so quiet here, no birds outside yet, no cars, only the sound of my keyboard and computer fan... I've been chatting with my friends for HOURS tonight, ALL night actually, and i just logged off from them... I should have stayed just a bit longer:p
Feelings are a weird thing.. One moment you sit there feeling completely ignored and alone amongst all the people you concider friends. Then in the next, you notice that everyone around you wants a piece of you, and all you want to do is hide and make them all go away:s
Right now, i'm having one of the latter moments:s So today, after being online now, i'm gonna be offline for the rest of the day and just sit in my bed and practice drawing:) Maybe i'll watch a movie later as well. I'm really tired after yesterday for some reason...
Thanks for the long-distance hug Shasta:) They help too you know;)
*POOF* (The lion diseappared in a cloud of smoke)
Right now, i'm having one of the latter moments:s So today, after being online now, i'm gonna be offline for the rest of the day and just sit in my bed and practice drawing:) Maybe i'll watch a movie later as well. I'm really tired after yesterday for some reason...
Thanks for the long-distance hug Shasta:) They help too you know;)
*POOF* (The lion diseappared in a cloud of smoke)
wow! in the first part it's hard to imagine the over the loss of a parent (unfortunatly i have), & the power of a simple hug.
this hit me like a ton of bricks. it's so surreal & realistic that it is scary how that it is almost exactly what had happened after my father had passed. i'm going to go & listen to some music & remember the good times.
this hit me like a ton of bricks. it's so surreal & realistic that it is scary how that it is almost exactly what had happened after my father had passed. i'm going to go & listen to some music & remember the good times.
Well...you're welcome. I'm glad you liked the story at least, and I agree that it's good to reflect from time-to-time.
I lost my step-dad (I was closer to him that my blood-father) in 2004, so i definitely know what the loss of a parent is like. He was and incredible trumpetist, and having played piano and sung with him so many times, alot of music has been difficult since then.
In any case, I'm glad you liked it. :)
I lost my step-dad (I was closer to him that my blood-father) in 2004, so i definitely know what the loss of a parent is like. He was and incredible trumpetist, and having played piano and sung with him so many times, alot of music has been difficult since then.
In any case, I'm glad you liked it. :)
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