It's not the murder that should have the mature setting, it's the filthy shaggy fur. Sheesh, that's disgusting! Get a bath!

Very cool. Looking forward to reading more :)

This is good, and I hope we see more.

Its beautifully written. I'm looking forward to more.

Interesting story so far.

You can really get a sense of Three's personality and manner of speaking in this one. Based on some of the other stories of Three, I know that she can be somewhat poetic and philosophical when the mood strikes her, but this piece basically sums up her feelings of her captivity in her sardonic storytelling style. It's easy enough to see that this was a torturous time for her and thus it's easy to understand why she doesn't go into much detail as well as the stoic resignation that hangs about the narrative when she says that she's been through this before. What I do find curious is how she describes her captor. I get the impression that while he did horrible things to her and warranted enough caution for her to play the dumb beast, Three never really felt that he was a real threat. It's one thing to be captive but knowing that your captor is either overconfident or incompetent enough that you'll find an opening for escape, it's another thing altogether when you simply know that he's just going to wither and die as your jailer, and all you have to do is make sure he keeps his security lax enough for you to see yourself out when he finally does croak. Even the point where she mentions that he would have lived another ten years had she not killed him seemed tinged with a sort of pity, as though all of his research just to prolong his life was for naught. Had this story been a bit more comical, Three likely would've said something like "he probably would've lived another twenty years if he had eaten more fresh fruit and gone outside for a walk every now and then instead of cooping himself up in his dungeon trying to find the secret of immortality."

This is a good start. Even though I know the gist of this story already, it will be interesting to get the details, as well as Three's perspective on it.

For what it's worth, I enjoyed it. Don't be so hard on yourself. The first couple drafts are always the worst.