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Barely made in time!
Just managed to finish writing just before the deadline, and since I started Uni work again, I guess it is in character for me.
Trying out different things and this time I am delving into background of Ruairi, my main sona. Since his inception I have seen him as a fantasy version of myself, and I wanted him to have a story after being inspired by various visual novels, such as Far Beyond the World. Recently, he has joined the ranks of (genuinely too many) characters that I implemented into Tabletop Roleplaying and RPGs and so came the subject of thinking about where he is from and what is his background. This gave the opportunity to focus on worldbuilding, and with this Thursday Prompt being 'Nature', allowed to try and go for a very descriptive depiction of the Isle of Ellismoor, what my dearest boi calls his home. Eventually, I might go on further into his lore (and perhaps even his adventures!) but so far, I would like to share this piece.
🧡💚💜
Barely made in time!
Just managed to finish writing just before the deadline, and since I started Uni work again, I guess it is in character for me.
Trying out different things and this time I am delving into background of Ruairi, my main sona. Since his inception I have seen him as a fantasy version of myself, and I wanted him to have a story after being inspired by various visual novels, such as Far Beyond the World. Recently, he has joined the ranks of (genuinely too many) characters that I implemented into Tabletop Roleplaying and RPGs and so came the subject of thinking about where he is from and what is his background. This gave the opportunity to focus on worldbuilding, and with this Thursday Prompt being 'Nature', allowed to try and go for a very descriptive depiction of the Isle of Ellismoor, what my dearest boi calls his home. Eventually, I might go on further into his lore (and perhaps even his adventures!) but so far, I would like to share this piece.
🧡💚💜
Category Story / Fantasy
Species Red Panda
Size 120 x 90px
File Size 4.8 kB
You paint a captivating scene. I love how the descriptions are interwoven with explanations about the history, and even some commentary from the person making the notes. Little touches like that go a long way in turning what would normally be an exposition dump into a deeply fascinating piece of worldbuilding.
The way you describe the creature in the canopy as a legend is excellent as well. Is that Ruairi, or just a creature of the forest?
The way you describe the creature in the canopy as a legend is excellent as well. Is that Ruairi, or just a creature of the forest?
If this was in a middle of a story, it would be a huge wall of description. But on its own, it is actually pretty wonderful. If you continue building on this, the choices are to sprinkle the information throughout the story, or to give a huge info-dump. I am trying the sprinkle method myself. The story just stops to a halt during long stretches of description.
Nothing wrong with descriptions as such. But they can be narratively problematic. Sometimes less is more. But for a few paragraphs of description, this is well written.
Nothing wrong with descriptions as such. But they can be narratively problematic. Sometimes less is more. But for a few paragraphs of description, this is well written.
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