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[Pokémon/Babyfur] A Toddler and His Toys
I was feeling pretty exhausted after a track meet I had yesterday, so I wrote this silly story before going to sleep. Considering my stories are often a whole lot lengthier, these shorter works are a relaxing treat to myself. Enjoy!
Category Story / Baby fur
Species Pokemon
Size 50 x 50px
File Size 10.6 kB
Listed in Folders
I never get enough of how you truly immerse your readers into what it is to be io the mind of a toddler. Anything and everything having endless potential for playing, learning, and feeling like the world is truly big, wide, and filled with more love than hate.
I also like how we get a reoccuring character in Pablo Pichu. He certainly charged up things in the story where the little SHINX learned about so many new tangible and intangible joys that life had in store for him. Perhaps, if you feel it worthwhile, you could bring back Penelope Plusle? She was downright adorable in being a pal to our Extra-SmallPIKACHU protagonist, (Lightning...?)
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The way you do your stories reminds me a lot of how I learned about Eastern Mythology and Business Practices during my collegiate career. Most Western efforts will create something and leave it at that. Eastern creations will follow more of an ongoing 'Iteration Process' wherein they'll make something, make it again, and continue to make it until it cannot be made genuinely better through an additional iteration. (This is why the 1980s saw USA car manufacturers being obliterated by Japanese automakers. Japanese vehicles were ugly and low quality in the 1960s and 1970s, but surged in the 1980s as the Japanese kept building upon the qualities that were good about each model of car they made while USA manufacturers remained complacent by doing little, or anything, to boost the quality and value of what they put out for sale.).
To make better sense of what I'm saying, your stories have certain aspects that show up in almost every tale you tell. For example, Pablo's playtime features the use of a bouncy ball. The bouncy ball has found its way into many of your stories with the tot interacting with it finding different ways to interact with it by themselves, their parents, friends, caretakers, etc. I most notably remember the bouncy ball being prominent in Due For A New Diaper with it coming back with far more story relevance in the sequel, Due For More Diapers. You then cleverly used it to help Lightning feel better about his circumstances when Penelpe used the simple toy to further their friendship.
You have other story elements that make appearances in a majority of your works. However the important thing is that you continue to 'build' upon how these aspects of storytelling flesh out the characters, scene, and situation you are making for your readers. Therefore, taking each consequential story you write since Due For A New Diaper, you are fine-tuning how the bouncy ball adds value to the story until you find you can no longer write a story with a bouncy ball that would feel like an improvement, or come to a point where the pressence of the bouncy ball will have a fixed set of ways to be played with given the characters, scenes, and situations it is a part of. :)
I also like how we get a reoccuring character in Pablo Pichu. He certainly charged up things in the story where the little SHINX learned about so many new tangible and intangible joys that life had in store for him. Perhaps, if you feel it worthwhile, you could bring back Penelope Plusle? She was downright adorable in being a pal to our Extra-SmallPIKACHU protagonist, (Lightning...?)
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The way you do your stories reminds me a lot of how I learned about Eastern Mythology and Business Practices during my collegiate career. Most Western efforts will create something and leave it at that. Eastern creations will follow more of an ongoing 'Iteration Process' wherein they'll make something, make it again, and continue to make it until it cannot be made genuinely better through an additional iteration. (This is why the 1980s saw USA car manufacturers being obliterated by Japanese automakers. Japanese vehicles were ugly and low quality in the 1960s and 1970s, but surged in the 1980s as the Japanese kept building upon the qualities that were good about each model of car they made while USA manufacturers remained complacent by doing little, or anything, to boost the quality and value of what they put out for sale.).
To make better sense of what I'm saying, your stories have certain aspects that show up in almost every tale you tell. For example, Pablo's playtime features the use of a bouncy ball. The bouncy ball has found its way into many of your stories with the tot interacting with it finding different ways to interact with it by themselves, their parents, friends, caretakers, etc. I most notably remember the bouncy ball being prominent in Due For A New Diaper with it coming back with far more story relevance in the sequel, Due For More Diapers. You then cleverly used it to help Lightning feel better about his circumstances when Penelpe used the simple toy to further their friendship.
You have other story elements that make appearances in a majority of your works. However the important thing is that you continue to 'build' upon how these aspects of storytelling flesh out the characters, scene, and situation you are making for your readers. Therefore, taking each consequential story you write since Due For A New Diaper, you are fine-tuning how the bouncy ball adds value to the story until you find you can no longer write a story with a bouncy ball that would feel like an improvement, or come to a point where the pressence of the bouncy ball will have a fixed set of ways to be played with given the characters, scenes, and situations it is a part of. :)
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