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Okay, here we go with the re-upload of my first novel Oseille. First up is the Prolog in which: We Meet Ciara Lohan and Her Family; Ciara Gets the Best and Worst Birthday Presents Ever; Ciara Travels to Oseille and Meets Niamh.
In retrospect there's a lot of things I would do differently if I were writing Oseille today. I think prologs are generally seen as being fairly archaic these days, for a start. But that's the things about first novels. The first time you try riding without training wheels, you're going to get a couple of scrapes. Still, as quasi-Irish fantasy stories go, I don't think I did too badly. I'm quite fond of the banter between Deirdre and Connor, and I could have let that go on for much longer if I'd let myself. Those two are still my favorites of all the couples I've created.
Oh yes, and as a side note, when I wrote these chapters I had no idea there really was a place called Blackpool. The first time I posted this, my friends from the UK kind of snickered at me. They're free to do so again, if they like.
In retrospect there's a lot of things I would do differently if I were writing Oseille today. I think prologs are generally seen as being fairly archaic these days, for a start. But that's the things about first novels. The first time you try riding without training wheels, you're going to get a couple of scrapes. Still, as quasi-Irish fantasy stories go, I don't think I did too badly. I'm quite fond of the banter between Deirdre and Connor, and I could have let that go on for much longer if I'd let myself. Those two are still my favorites of all the couples I've created.
Oh yes, and as a side note, when I wrote these chapters I had no idea there really was a place called Blackpool. The first time I posted this, my friends from the UK kind of snickered at me. They're free to do so again, if they like.
Category Story / General Furry Art
Species Vulpine (Other)
Size 120 x 120px
File Size 107.5 kB
Well, never mind about how prologues are seen. Personally I don't see any reason not to have them, if they suit your story. Anyway, I've set myself to reading this story properly this time, and as if for the first time. I hope I'll do a better job of keeping up than I did when trying to read 200+ pages in one go.
Of course it can't help but seem just slightly strange reading about Niamh (especially) and Ciara like this, given all that's happened since then (and not just in the story!) but nevertheless I think it's an interesting prologue, with just about the right amount of detail. The sparkiness between Deirdre and Connor is very nicely done, but in all truth I tend to think that Embarr is something of the star of this first part!
Also, I very much like the PDF presentation. It's much easier on the eyes than a standard word processor file, and I'll have to remember that.
Of course it can't help but seem just slightly strange reading about Niamh (especially) and Ciara like this, given all that's happened since then (and not just in the story!) but nevertheless I think it's an interesting prologue, with just about the right amount of detail. The sparkiness between Deirdre and Connor is very nicely done, but in all truth I tend to think that Embarr is something of the star of this first part!
Also, I very much like the PDF presentation. It's much easier on the eyes than a standard word processor file, and I'll have to remember that.
True. I actually like the prolog quite a bit, especially since it lets you see Connor and Deirdre together the way I always imagined them. I just wonder if maybe there was a better way for me to attach it to the rest of the story. But that's the way you do, isn't it? You see all the flaws in your work no matter how long you've spent polishing it. As for reading it, well thanks! I do hope you'll enjoy it. But I have no plans to take it back down once its up again. Not so long as FA still exists. So don't feel you have to push yourself.
Yeah, after everything that's happened it seems a little odd to go back to this earlier time to me, too. That's the trouble with choosing a character you created for another purpose to be your avatar. I think you're right about Embarr, too. I hadn't quite thought about it that way when I wrote it, but he does kind of steal the spotlight doesn't he? Well, he is quite an important character so why not let him shine for a bit? I've always loved the interactions between Connor and Deirdre. As I said in my own comments, they're still my favorite of all the couples I've ever created. Neither of them are the mushy, cuddly sort, but I think they're well suited to each other.
I wish I'd thought to use the .pdf format all along. I've really decided I like it, too, and it's nice to not have to worry about whether converting it over will mess up my layout.
Yeah, after everything that's happened it seems a little odd to go back to this earlier time to me, too. That's the trouble with choosing a character you created for another purpose to be your avatar. I think you're right about Embarr, too. I hadn't quite thought about it that way when I wrote it, but he does kind of steal the spotlight doesn't he? Well, he is quite an important character so why not let him shine for a bit? I've always loved the interactions between Connor and Deirdre. As I said in my own comments, they're still my favorite of all the couples I've ever created. Neither of them are the mushy, cuddly sort, but I think they're well suited to each other.
I wish I'd thought to use the .pdf format all along. I've really decided I like it, too, and it's nice to not have to worry about whether converting it over will mess up my layout.
Thanks, I'm really glad that you like it!. I don't have it all up yet. I didn't want to just flood my watchers with dozens of posts. This is a full length novel we're talking about. But I plan to have more up before too long. I should have another chapter or two up a little later today.
It is kind of an unusual name, especially when you're (as I was) this ignorant little farm kid who'd never been out of her state, never mind the US. I wanted something that sounded slightly dirty and unappealing, to match with the overall shabbiness of the city as you see it later in the book. I had no idea I was going to be maligning and entire city in what would turn out to be the nicest country I've ever visited.
Aw, well I'm glad you still like it and that you still think it works even after all this time. I can't help but see it as a little bit amateurish compared to what I can do these days. Not to get too big a head about my abilities or anything. But I don't think it's too bad for a first novel, and there are definitely parts of it that I still really like. And thanks for the well wishes, too! I hope it will pick up at least a few more readers than it had the first time I posted it. But I'd be content with knowing that my friends enjoy it, too.
Aw, well I'm glad you still like it and that you still think it works even after all this time. I can't help but see it as a little bit amateurish compared to what I can do these days. Not to get too big a head about my abilities or anything. But I don't think it's too bad for a first novel, and there are definitely parts of it that I still really like. And thanks for the well wishes, too! I hope it will pick up at least a few more readers than it had the first time I posted it. But I'd be content with knowing that my friends enjoy it, too.
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