I can't thank you enough for sharing this series. This will be one of my all time favorites for forever. Thanks for diving deep into tf realm

At least Lyall and Jeremy will be keeping that incident a secret. But I must ask, will you be doing more in this setting? Maybe even taking commissions for specific animals? I'd gladly pay to see someone become a bassarisk.

I’m wanting to use the setting more in the future :)

I am totally open to ideas for different TF species too!

Maybe a snake world be different.

Snake, Canine, etc! There is a ton of potential with this type of story.

This is a lovely chapter...it's been wonderful to read this as you've been putting it out.

Wow, freakin wow!

So suspenseful, I love it. Rylie's hug is just

Woah, the wings really are the tripping point. I love how beautifully the stages of grief are illustrated throughout the series thus far; he's on acceptance now.

The dream was very well written. Had just the right tone for the situation, ominous, mysterious, unsettling. Love it

I really feel bad for Rylie. They've become really close as they relate more, but Lyall changed so fast toward the end while she changed relatively little. It seems she had no time to prepare. My bet is she'll be the next to change

Rereading this, the hawk and Lyall, if they were ever really separate, seem to have integrated during the dream. Although if that's the case, he was still staring back at himself as the hawk, right? If they're unified now, who is that? Whatever the case, it makes sense that he keeps insisting he's still in control

A really nice chapter

One follow up comment/critique now that I have had the time to read it a second time (yes I am reading all these more than once )

There's an anatomical error in the foot transformation sequence where you describe the hallux-toe (the large backwards pointing one) as emerging from the heel. This is not very realistic. It would be more anatomically consistent for the human big toe to migrate round to point backwards, forming the large raptor hallux-toe. The heel should start to lift up off the ground entirely as the ankle shifts upwards towards becoming that characteristic "reverse knee" that birds appear to have. It's not actually a reversed knee, it's the ankle. Birds do have knees and they angle the normal way, but owing to the relatively short upper thigh, the knee is usually completely hidden by feathers.

So after Lyall's change is over, it would feel like constantly walking on tip-toe everywhere. Except the big toe is now pointing backward to provide stability.

If you're not sure what I'm talking about perhaps reference image might help: https://upload.wikimedia.org/wikipe.....tte_oiseau.JPG

12 - upper leg, i.e. thigh
7 - knee
10 - lower leg, i.e. shins
8 - called the "tarsometatarsus", it's basically a fusion of all the bones in the bridge of the foot
(in between 8 and 10 is the ankle, it's unlabelled for some reason)

I hope that makes sense? I know you've been pretty careful with the anatomical realism so far in this series so I felt I had to point it out.

Thanks for the heads up! I’ll definitely fix that bit to make it more anatomically correct! I knew eventually I would make a major mistake! :)

No worries, it's not really that major! I think it's great how positively you respond to critique

If someone is going to take time out of their day to write a critique, I think of that as someone wanting to help improve my writing. I can never be upset about that! :)

Updated that section! Thank you again

Finally, my favorite part of bird transformations arrived! I've been looking forward to him getting his lovely talons. I was just hoping that we would get to see him try to use them as his replacement hands for a bit.

Part of me keeps hoping for the stereotypical good ending to this story, where a cure is miraculously found at the last minute or something like that. At the same time, I'm excited to see what happens to him when the transformation completes. I'm also sad that this wonderful story will be coming to an end soon. I've been looking forward to reading the next chapter each week. You've got an amazing world built here and I'm looking forward to seeing what else might come out of it.

This has been going on for so long now, I'm not sure what I'm going to read in my spare time when it's over. but I suppose, just like Lyall, not point in delaying the inevitable.

Oh my God I'm crying. Goodbyes are always so sad. This story has been incredible so far. I just can't put it down!

Masterful work. Just masterful.

I just can't put into words how strongly you've made me feel in this story.

Like... You've touched on something that I just couldn't let myself feel. Just...AMAZING

Glad to hear you are enjoying it! Can’t wait to hear your thoughts on chapter 19 😁