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Story / Fat Furs
Species Rabbit / Hare
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My first story posted here! I imagine it being the first in a series with these characters mainly focusing on Chloe of course as well.
You can expect to see more of this kind of slice of life stuff from me in the future.
Please let me know what you think, comments are encouraged.
You can expect to see more of this kind of slice of life stuff from me in the future.
Please let me know what you think, comments are encouraged.
Category Story / Fat Furs
Species Rabbit / Hare
Size 108 x 120px
File Size 77.9 kB
A good story with a lot expressed of the characters through their dialogue and interactions.
The formatting of FA like this makes it hard to read due to the blockiness, I use .pdfs but those have to be downloaded, so that's a give and take of the personnel choice their.
Dialogue tags; if the character is going the act of speaking use a comma and not a , .
“Hockey seems more like Russia’s thing.(dialogue)” Chloe agreed (Tag).
“Hockey seems more like Russia’s thing,” Chloe agreed.
You can learn about the ins and outs of dialogue punctuation and weird rules here.
https://www.furaffinity.net/view/45781356/
The formatting of FA like this makes it hard to read due to the blockiness, I use .pdfs but those have to be downloaded, so that's a give and take of the personnel choice their.
Dialogue tags; if the character is going the act of speaking use a comma and not a , .
“Hockey seems more like Russia’s thing.(dialogue)” Chloe agreed (Tag).
“Hockey seems more like Russia’s thing,” Chloe agreed.
You can learn about the ins and outs of dialogue punctuation and weird rules here.
https://www.furaffinity.net/view/45781356/
Agreed with the above comment that some formatting work would help. For me, at least, spacing between paragraphs would help a lot.
That said, I'm not usually one for dialog-heavy stories but I liked this one. Felt as though the dialog served the characters instead of the characters being used for dialog, if that makes sense. And there was enough description to go alongside the dialog.
That said, I'm not usually one for dialog-heavy stories but I liked this one. Felt as though the dialog served the characters instead of the characters being used for dialog, if that makes sense. And there was enough description to go alongside the dialog.
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